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Pull my strings... my love
Contributed by
In_a_While
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Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 10:44:34 AM in AEST
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pull my strings and sing
i'll sway to music playing
Like everyone, i'm wooden
on a stage where i'll be saying
"You can't burn like me!
i see though eyes of stain
i turn to charcoal ash
then sketch the people's pain!"
pull my strings until i wave
to a crowd of painted faces
they applaud the puppet's god
despite wooden disgraces
she tore feathers from my wings
and poured tears into my heart
i'm clipping all my strings
cause i'm tired of playing a part
dw
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Re: Pull my strings... my love
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by StephaniePaige on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 10:46:55 AM AEST
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| I absolutely LOVE this. I've been in the position, and i've been fed up just the same (well if I'm correctly gathering what this is about). You expressed it well. |
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Re: Pull my strings... my love
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by unknown_utopia on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 11:47:34 AM AEST
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I like this
well done
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Re: Pull my strings... my love
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by zenith66 on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 12:14:17 PM AEST
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Love it, keep writing...
You really made me feel for you here
Just like you
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Re: Pull my strings... my love
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 12:59:59 PM AEST
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WOW! Exceptional poetry here! Unbelievable emotion and
expressed in the most tortured imagery imaginable.
There is a point where becoming "fed up" as they say,
breeds so much emotion, that it bursts from our hearts
(and pens) in the most passionate display of agony!! And
boy, you have done WELL with that here.
Excellent, EXCELLENT piece.
As I read, I kept thinking each stanza was brilliant, but
then was followed by an equally, if not MORE brilliant one.
WOW! This was an altogether amazing write filled with
the most delicious metaphors.
Outstanding!!
~Breezy |
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Re: Pull my strings... my love
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 03:27:54 PM AEST
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a sad laden soul sings within this write,
I loved the ending ohhhhhh how I relate is a good feeling once the scissors come out.
bravo
~Michelle~ |
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