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I Wish I was A Star
Contributed by
honey56
on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 05:02:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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I wish I were a star just hanging,
Chilling long side the
Moon..
I wish I may I wish I might just
Chilling with the heavenly stars
Neighbors
I wish I may I wish I might make you
My perfect friends
Just hanging, chilling shooting the
Breeze..
I wish I may I wish I might gaze down
From the blacken
Skies…
Scattering gold dust around your feet
I wish I may I wish I might make
Friends with the
Moon..
Copyright ©
honey56
... [
2007-06-18 05:02:53]
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Re: I Wish I was A Star
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 07:17:35 AM AEST
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A very good write though on a personal note I am not fond of the word "chilling" in the context you have used it. This doesn't take from the poem however because it is only my personal feeling. I enjoyed the sentiment and flow very much. Good Job.
Splendid!
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Re: I Wish I was A Star
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 11:02:24 AM AEST
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Enjoy it alot.
thanks for sharing :) |
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Re: I Wish I was A Star
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by FRANCO on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 11:03:26 AM AEST
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It is an universal dream for every poet to be closed to the moon up in the dark sky - and you my poet friend, have illustrated it with perfection.
well written.
FRANCO. |
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Re: I Wish I was A Star
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 11:56:25 PM AEST
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What a lovely thought ... to blend yourself among the moon
and stars ... *siiiiiiiiiiiiigh* how gorgeous a thought is that!!?
(Don't like the "shooting the Breeze" bit though ... lol j/k)
Overall a very beautiful, image-filled write. So light and airy ..
like a dream ~
~Breezy |
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Re: I Wish I was A Star
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by doug on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 09:33:15 PM AEST
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A lovely poem. Gives me a peaceful feeling
but at the same time left me wondering why
you wish your were a star. You never seem
to tell your reason but that's perfectly alright.
It just leaves me with a a bit of curiosity which
gives the poem that little extra something.
Lovely work , Truly , Doug |
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Re: I Wish I was A Star
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 10:54:44 PM AEST
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Hugely enjoyable sentiment; gave me a nice lift under rainy skies in Sydney. Personally, I take any opportunity to get away with saying 'just chill'n with the homies' - alas, there are not many...
Spike |
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Re: I Wish I was A Star
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 6th October 2007 @ 08:07:47 AM AEST
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A relaxing and calming read.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us all
Steve |
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