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Blackest Black
Contributed by
Tot
on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 04:03:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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frantic I am
to find some right in this
stranded I am
in the bliss of emptiness
My heart
sits inside this door
frantic it is
to find another home
Placid
the whirlwind beyond
lost
against the song
the smell of the night air
the feel of the silent breeze
a dance
I feel in my soul
tomorrow
I will begin a new
a strand of timid fate
a shred of peaceful hue
Yesterday
I have heard
seems so far away
in my own mind
it could be my biggest mistake
a shade of blackest black
a smile of twisted reveal
wounds upon the shallow hall
fragrant misery
planted here
like a flower waiting to bloom
fixed upon
the loneliness and gloom
Come dance with me!
Oh, a dance so slow
the kiss upon-
the kiss upon my soul
Bellowing into the night
my heart is calling
treasures lie in wait
for one who fails to see them
my fingers bring upon the grimace
my eyes
are they the window?
Oh, follow this frantic heart
follow me into the hollow
Come dance until the day is new
and brings upon a peace a new
dance with me
dance with me
our hearts shall spin around
the blackest black
dance with me as the night grows cold
let us begin
I shall wait for you ,frantic heart
in the solitude
of the night
I wait for you
I wait for you
I wait for you still
Morning's light
the sun smile's upon my face
but my love has yet to come
and still,I wait
Copyright ©
Tot
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2007-06-18 04:03:16]
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Re: Blackest Black
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 08:37:47 AM AEST
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Kandice,
a wonderful blackest of black write! Powerful and I loved absolutely loved the way you ended this. Such a powerful metaphor how the darkest dark is to be waiting for something that may never come, but as dark as it is there obviously is a hope making this beyond just a dark write. There are so many lines, so many questions and metaphors that stand out in this glorious work. Brilliant in every sense of the word. Your debutante in the backseat of the blackest black. But somewhere behind a shady tree maybe that which you wait for.
BRILLIANT!
SCM |
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Re: Blackest Black
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by FRANCO on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 11:18:20 AM AEST
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Waoo... what a way to express your love; for the love who is yet to come.
Wonderful I liked your style.
FRANCO. |
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Re: Blackest Black
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 12:19:23 PM AEST
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wow what a way to express your love
beautiful |
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Re: Blackest Black
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 12:16:14 AM AEST
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Good grief! SCM has lost his mind! lol (Incidentally, I'm with you on that one ~ lol)
Kandice, this spoke to me with intimate familiarity. Damn!! You can evoke the most
amazing emotions with your work. I was awash in so many during this passionate
read. I too, love the way you ended it. Gosh, could an ending be any more outstanding?
WOW!
You commanded my attention with the opening stanzas and I was held captive from
that moment on. You speak with an honesty and innocence that is exceptionally precious,
but there is a WEALTH of wisdom in your words. Beautiful, magical and OH! so passionate!
Excellent post, dear poet. (Again, you have reminded me of so many things ~)
~Roxanne |
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