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~My Once & Future Self~
Contributed by
misfitme
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Saturday, 16th June 2007 @ 02:01:26 PM in AEST
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In a memory of mine~
from way on high
I spied myself gazing~
at we in the sky...
Through connecting ourselves~
May & December
I watched while the future~
we first remembered...
~~~
Listening for footsteps~
outside of my door
The last of which knowing~
when heard were no more...
Then from under my pillow~
out I retrieved
Our own secret journal~
of things in believed...
Drawing back my covers~
I slipped out of bed
Wondering why they called~
this time of night,"Dead"...
For never more alive~
had ever I felt
Then when late at night~
among spirits I dwelt...
Cracking open my door~
down the hall I peered
Checking both ways~
to make sure mine was clear...
Then in stealthy silence~
from my room to the stairs
I crossed the landing~
as quick as I dared...
Taking one at a time~
the steps grown so old
That had I not,~
could've with noise on me told...
& because of being found out~
I was scared to death
Even too loud seemed~
the sound of my breath...
So did I hold it~
'till the very last stair
Which I barely reached~
before needing more air...
It was quite a bit darker~
down here below
Unsoftened by night light~
or candles glow...
I liked it this way~
it seemed some how rich
Perhaps a close kin~
to the dark they call,"pitch"...
My bare feet traversed~
the way by heart known
To the front of the house~
in seconds I'd flown...
Then I climbed up onto~
my window seat perch
And between the cushions~
with my fingers for searched...
The candle & matches~
I'd kept hidden there
As well as ink for my pen~
& tie for my hair...
Arranging the pillows~
to surround myself
I tucked myself in~
like a book on a shelf...
Then I closed my eyes~
while my breathing slowed
So I could feel the night~
& join in her flow...
With myself settled in~
& no one else about
Soon the house spirits~
would start coming out...
to be continued...
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misfitme
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by lillyjane on
Saturday, 16th June 2007 @ 08:59:32 PM AEST
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| Looking forward to hearing the rest its brilliant xxx |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by Dom on
Saturday, 16th June 2007 @ 11:36:25 PM AEST
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Brilliant writing, I found myself holding my breath with you as you were going down the stairs. This takes me back to my own childhood adventures.
Can't wait for the next installment!
Dom |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th June 2007 @ 12:10:18 AM AEST
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Oh my sweet missyme ~
How splendid! This was positively drippiing with nostalgia!
I adore the way your wrote this; I got so lost in the rhythm. The story,
well, my word! How intriguing. I, too, can't wait for the continuation.
You painted a beautiful picture in our heads, dear poet. It was like
peering inside a dream. I could actually see the little girl sitting
there ... all cozied up in the window seat, (one of my favourite
places to be - *wink*)
Loverly write, hun. Just loverly!
~Breezy |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by shelby on
Sunday, 17th June 2007 @ 01:42:41 AM AEST
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The night touched you and this beautiful write..... I could picture each movement in my minds eye. Birlliant write. Thanks for sharing a glimpse into you!
~Michelle~ |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by Crow on
Sunday, 17th June 2007 @ 08:09:19 AM AEST
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| there is such a softness in this beautiful write, the little girl, and the little girl in the woman who might still have pillows, and candle, Vincent |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by Honey56 on
Sunday, 17th June 2007 @ 08:46:37 AM AEST
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What a great write!
Brilliant! |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by NoSaint on
Sunday, 17th June 2007 @ 09:12:04 AM AEST
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awaiting the rest this drew me and left me wanting more
NS |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 02:10:02 AM AEST
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simply elegant and enchanting, written in flowing style so smooth it took me back to my own childhood tip toeing around a big house with a bigger imagination lol, thank you for that, this poem is precious!
love n' hugs nessa
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by myheartsvoice on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 01:04:08 AM AEST
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I remeber this one and now i truly know the significance behind it and of course it is another one of your treasures for theart to endure and the soul to absorb. Beautiful and
most enjoyable a peice to read and cherrish.
((((MM))))
Ben |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by doug on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 09:41:31 PM AEST
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Lovely work. I am interested to see where
you will go with this. This has the making
of a great story. Truly , Doug |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by FRANCO on
Friday, 22nd June 2007 @ 11:40:35 AM AEST
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Waoo... friend this one is a thriller, that I almost stopped breathing as I followed you through your poem and lo, (sigh) to be continued...? I can hardly wait to know what is next.
I liked your style in this poem.
FRANCO. |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by needledancing on
Wednesday, 11th July 2007 @ 12:50:48 AM AEST
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More...more...don't leave me hanging here.
Hurry finish...let me see..oh yes, you awaken the excited child in me who has to know...what is going to happen. Well done fantastic flow and totally captivating. Stop reading this and get back to work on the finish....lol |
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Re: ~My Once & Future Self~
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 7th May 2008 @ 11:10:10 AM AEST
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May the muse perch upon your souls sill and whisper to your pen the dance of spirits and selves on high...
O adventerous soul let it be known Excalibur has been drawn from the souls stone...You and the land are One.
Peace
Dantien |
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