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MISSING YOU
Contributed by
MILLER_GENUINE_SWINE
on
Friday, 15th June 2007 @ 01:11:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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SO MANY DAYS WE GO
SO MANY MILES APART
SO MANY YEARS I HAVE WAITED
JUST TO BE WITH YOU
TO FEEL YOU IN MY ARMS
TO STEAL THAT FIRST KISS
TO FEEL YOU IN MY ARMS THREW THE NIGHT
SO MANY NIGHTS I HAVE DREAMED OF OUR HAPPYNESS
ONLY TO WAKE ALONE ONCE MORE
SOMEDAY SOON WE CAN BE TOGETHER
FOREVER MORE NEVER TO BE ALONE EVER AGAIN
Copyright ©
MILLER_GENUINE_SWINE
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2007-06-15 13:11:56]
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Re: MISSING YOU
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by Tot on
Saturday, 16th June 2007 @ 02:49:30 AM AEST
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| Wow, I can really relate to this right now...there is such a longing and a hope within your words...may all your forlorn nights be met with an ending soon! ~Tot |
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Re: MISSING YOU
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 16th June 2007 @ 09:16:28 AM AEST
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No offence, I found this poem to be very empty and found the capitalization to be quite obnoxious and childish. I can’t take what your saying seriously when everything is in caps. I’ve checked out a lot of your other poetry and I’m pretty much seeing all caps in all the others as well. Please, for your own sake, stop using caps. Also, it seems like you didn’t take much time to write this. I mean, i get what your poem means; it just came off rushed and hollow. I know these emotions are not hollow for you, so try to flesh out your poem so the reader can feel your pain. So try to break out of your mold, I can tell you can write great things you just need to find better ways to write it. Best of luck!
~D.S. Hammoulton~
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Re: MISSING YOU
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by lillyjane on
Saturday, 16th June 2007 @ 08:43:12 PM AEST
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| I DONT AGREE WITH DSHammoulton ITS A LOVELY POEM AND CAN RELATE TO IT. XXX |
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Re: MISSING YOU
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by endlesspath on
Tuesday, 7th August 2007 @ 06:43:18 AM AEST
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i do not agree with them either. i felt you have poured more than heart into this write. do they feel the same for one who seems to be so inlove with another? i do not see many people pour out words so simple, and so undertanding for a reader to see. go get this person you speak of and never let go. good luck. i am hoping its felt for both sides.
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