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Dwindled Thoughts
Contributed by
Tot
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Saturday, 9th June 2007 @ 03:00:55 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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dwindled thoughts
escaping before sunrise
oh pleasant!
a mask
a fantastic disguise
scoffing beautifully
remarkably still
turning the events
alas the road trudges uphill
scarce to recall
the thought lost upon the stone
the smile etched there
forever is gone
vacantly escaping
what lies above
peacefully holding
to what was once a love
Flowers so beautifully stand
on what is
this hallowed land
whatever shall come
grasping for life
silence the drum
upon the terf
this is, home
dwindled thoughts
oh lost upon this stone
hanging in silence
the smile is gone
waiting to be found
for what seemed so long
breaking hearts
waking demons
bringing misery above the ground
oh these thoughts
whatever they mean
hang there in silence
with lack of reason
WHATEVER shall come
will never be so
hanging in silence
deciding to let go
time cannot heal
the wounds created
day by day
more aggravated
what time cannot touch
what losing will never win
forgetting the hearts
who needed an end
oh dwindled thoughts
HOW LOST HERE
upon this stone!
hung there in silence
gave up on what was life
forgetting love
just giving it all up instead
in that selfish moment
dead
Copyright ©
Tot
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2007-06-09 03:00:55]
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Re: Dwindled Thoughts
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by Cannabiskilla on
Saturday, 9th June 2007 @ 05:22:18 AM AEST
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Love it! I esspecially like the way it ends.
Its like the words themselves die.
Ending the way all things do, in death.
you are very talented. keep up the good work. i will look forward to reading more!
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Re: Dwindled Thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 11th June 2007 @ 09:46:31 AM AEST
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Oh my ... Kandice, there is something incredibly forlorn in this, and not just the fact
that it has been posted as 'dark'. I can't get past the images in here, especially the stone.
I read this amidst distractions, and so came back for another, (and another). I am awe-struck
and almost broken ... your words are like a mirrored reflection of a soul that's been torn.
(and boy .. do I relate!)
I love your style. I adore how your thoughts escape onto the page so easily... and in a way
that is so damn emotive. It's like you reached inside my very soul and pulled out every thought
(light and dark) and spread them on the page. It scares me how you can do that. Amazing!
Brilliant piece of darkness, dear friend. (Hoping that this darkness sheds to allow a
little light to shine through for you ~)
~Roxanne
(What's love got to do with it indeed, tina! Everything, I say .. how could we feel, good and
bad, otherwise? Wonderful write! Absolute perfection) |
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