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One Smile
Contributed by
trueecho
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Friday, 18th May 2007 @ 01:37:00 AM in AEST
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One smile from you is all I need
Suddenly, I feel alive
From misery to exstacy
And everything is ok
Though not apparent all the time
As the moon does not always shine
Reveal your smile judiciously
Cutting through under any conditions
Becoming your most powerful ally
Else they will bite back
Leaving you lost
With only one remedy
And you will fall if you don't use it
Then the the real you will live
Dance your dance today
Tommorow is not promised to us
As time flies, this is the you that dies
Copyright ©
trueecho
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2007-05-18 01:37:00]
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Re: One Smile
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 18th May 2007 @ 05:36:47 AM AEST
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a very well expressed piece.. I absolutely loved the end stanza.. so true how after time the old self fades away great job
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Re: One Smile
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by Inevitable on
Friday, 18th May 2007 @ 09:27:12 AM AEST
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| Yeh I liked the end too. That was the best part. |
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Re: One Smile
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by zenmind on
Thursday, 16th August 2007 @ 07:18:54 AM AEST
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wow, again, I really love your work! This is the third poem of yours I've read, and I have really enjoyed all of them! Mostly because of how in touch you are with the most bare essence of life and love. I really get that from your poems including this one. The second stanza is maybe my favorite part of the poem, I just feel like there is a lot being said there. The image of the moon that doesn't always reflect light was amazing. I like the vibe of just "smile, be happy, and life will take care of itself" that is what I get from this. And again, at the end you touch upon the spiritual depths of humanity, showing your understanding of how while a part of us dies, our true selves are eternal.
Be True,
zenmind |
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