|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Porcilen Doll
Contributed by
StoneAngel
on
Thursday, 17th May 2007 @ 02:43:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
StoryPoetry
|
Why do you ignore me
Why do you play rough with me
I'm only a porcilen doll
I may seem strong
I may be rough with people
I may be bold
But I go to bed every night
torn apart and crying
I am a fragile doll
who has kept her innocence
So be carefull when
you handle me
I may fall to the floor
and break
So be careful
When you handling me
I may fall and break
into a million peices
'cause I am only
a porcilen doll
Copyright ©
StoneAngel
... [
2007-05-17 14:43:31]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Porcilen Doll
(User Rating: 1 )
by sadaddy on
Thursday, 17th May 2007 @ 03:29:04 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Nicely written young lady, may your heart be filled with peace and joy each and everyday.
sadaddy |
|
|
Re: Porcilen Doll
(User Rating: 1 )
by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 18th May 2007 @ 02:53:15 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I couldn't help but commenting. I do not want to sound mean, but you have misspelled the word "PORCELAIN" throughout your poem. It was a good write, but it takes so much away from the piece with the spelling error. It just takes a few seconds to check spelling. Granted, we all make spelling mistakes, I catch myself frequently, and when I don't....I appreciate when folks let me know.
I do understand, as I am sure others' do, about feeling as if one is made out of porcelain.
There is a beautiful song performed by the Grateful Dead called "China Doll" and your poem brought that to mind.....
"Take up your china doll, take up your china doll,
Its only fractured and just a little nervous from the fall."
Thanks for sharing your work.
Much peace,
Laura
|
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
