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My Mind Sprays
Contributed by
unknown_utopia
on
Thursday, 17th May 2007 @ 11:08:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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It's the things that you do
that drives me insane
like the sound of your voice
when you say my name.
Something is coming
sensations are flowing...
I wanna be your lover
you are my fantasy
swaying in the candle light
slowly dancing...
I look into your eyes
as I kiss your lips.
Emotionally I'm swollen
and my mind
explodes
and sprays what I've been holding
Ohh
I see your face
twinkling
in the starlight
I hear your voice
whisper
at night
I wanna hold all night,
keep you warm
under the covers
and I
wanna be your lover.
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unknown_utopia
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2007-05-17 11:08:23]
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Re: My Mind Sprays
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by emystar on
Thursday, 17th May 2007 @ 01:16:47 PM AEST
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So sweet. I think I'm jealous.
Big luv, smiles,
emy |
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Re: My Mind Sprays
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by scrivonel on
Friday, 18th May 2007 @ 12:19:41 AM AEST
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Nice poem, I especially liked:
Emotionally I'm swollen
and my mind
explodes
and sprays what I've been holding
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Re: My Mind Sprays
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by Spike on
Saturday, 2nd June 2007 @ 10:19:44 PM AEST
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could have easily gone under song lyrics, the wording and metre is so 'groovy', if you know what I mean. Maybe a little too metaphorical for some re the arousal bit, but it works - perfect atmosphere for the fantasy/wishful thinking made real.
I'm impressed.
Spike
(p.s. line 2 stanza 1 'drives' should be singular).
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Re: My Mind Sprays
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by needledancing on
Monday, 2nd July 2007 @ 10:12:05 PM AEST
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| A passionate write that tingles at the heartstrings. |
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