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Melting
Contributed by
RaineBurkhart
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Tuesday, 15th May 2007 @ 10:36:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Melting in my heart; melting me so clear,
Melting me now and feeling again fear,
Melting into pieces, melting the love we know,
Melting my mind, my body, and melting my vanquished soul,
I look back on our melted memories, wondering what we've done,
Now my feelings for you are melting, and it's only just begun,
So go on without me in your life, and as i'm melting for you,
You're melting, for me too!
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RaineBurkhart
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2007-05-15 22:36:32]
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Re: Melting
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 15th May 2007 @ 11:59:13 PM AEST
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This was a well expressed poem.. I like how you kept using the theme of melting throughout the whole poem.. Creative and well expressed.. Great poem..
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Melting
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 16th May 2007 @ 11:41:09 AM AEST
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Good way of expressing the "meltdown" of people torn in a broken relationship. Like Christina, I sort of dig the repetition of the "melting". It made it more of a tangible piece of writing. Well done.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: Melting
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by Valerie_Pearson on
Thursday, 17th May 2007 @ 03:03:55 AM AEST
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| I'm melting too, so many feelings within a broken heart, keep up the writing, your doing great , Valerie |
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