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Idol
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Tuesday, 1st May 2007 @ 06:05:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
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That idol, black eyes and curly mop,
without parents, love or court,
nobler than Greek and Roman fables;
his domain, insolent..
verdant with foliage
down the dawn to beaches
and hidden places
with ferocious names.
Flowering forests that flash and flare-
remembering the girl with orange lips,
kness crossed and naked in the shade,
dressed by rainbows and floral streams..
and in my dreams
she strolled by terraces
adjacent to the sea.
Now it is he, the little boy
dead behind the rosebush
with his young mother;
though its flowers drone
and slopes cradle them.
clouds still gather
high over the sea..
formed by an eternity
of hot tears.
B
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Re: Idol
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st May 2007 @ 10:58:26 PM AEST
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I must have read this four or five times just to get the true feel of it.
It has such great beauty to it....and such great sadness.
It stirs deep waters.... |
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Re: Idol
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 2nd May 2007 @ 05:55:51 PM AEST
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Ya i must say i agree with Phil there about this write.Lol Billy you can't just write stuff half way you have to go all the way .Your truely an amazing writer.
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Re: Idol
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by wizard on
Monday, 18th June 2007 @ 01:12:59 AM AEST
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bro,
this is an amazing write, i think i understand it more than the average reader would, as several of the elusive nuances are more apparent to those who know you as not just a poet, but also as an individual.
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Re: Idol
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by Dom on
Sunday, 24th June 2007 @ 07:18:16 PM AEST
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There is beauty in the sadness conveyed here, as I almost always find is true. I loved how you ended this, its a very potent image.
Take care,
Dom |
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Re: Idol
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by myheartsvoice on
Sunday, 24th June 2007 @ 10:18:50 PM AEST
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A splendid portrait of many days gone by your poetry reminds me of places i wish i could go back to, places i wish i never left to begin with. lovely peice in deed.
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Re: Idol
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by Keilantra on
Thursday, 5th July 2007 @ 05:07:51 AM AEST
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i loved it. it was free flowing anf dark and beautiful and just the kindof thing i love to read. great write, really.
keep iit up
xXx
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Re: Idol
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by shelby on
Saturday, 7th July 2007 @ 11:03:15 AM AEST
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Emotions everywhere..... entire write solid and forthright but the final stanza sealed the deal. I love how your vivid images can take a person right there
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Re: Idol
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd July 2007 @ 03:19:53 AM AEST
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Plagiarism! Billy you are a damn fraud!
Rimbaud's Genie [www.tonykline.co.uk]
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