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I Love You
Contributed by
BEE
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Tuesday, 1st May 2007 @ 12:18:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I love you
I am never going to let you go
Forever and ever
My love will only come more
My feelings
Up with fury
Feelings flying
In a tornado
Everything
Perfect
With out a dought
Everything I've wanted
Your in angel
Your my angel
Everything is beautiful
Amazing
Show me your love
Lets make this world more
More then what it is
Somthing unpredictable
More like a solar eclipse
From time to time
Beyond the sun
Moon
Stars
Make this life worth living
Your everything
Branden Goodrich
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BEE
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2007-05-01 00:18:14] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: I Love You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Honey56 on
Tuesday, 1st May 2007 @ 03:20:37 AM AEST (User
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Very nice read..
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Re: I Love You
(User Rating: 1 ) by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 1st May 2007 @ 03:24:06 AM AEST (User
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a very simple yet lovely write nicely done
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Re: I Love You
(User Rating: 1 ) by MILLER_GENUINE_SWINE on
Tuesday, 1st May 2007 @ 03:43:08 AM AEST (User
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LOVE CAN BE SO WONDERFULL
VERY NICE WRITE
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Re: I Love You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Butterat_Zool on
Tuesday, 1st May 2007 @ 11:48:12 AM AEST (User
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I'm glad you're in love. Really, I am. But please, work on your spelling. This was too sappy for my tastes. I don't care that she's an angel, but i'm deeply interested in what specifically makes her angelic. The last line is unnecessary. She isn't actually everything. She isn't the ocean, she isn't a moped, she isn't the CEO of Crayola. I understand that it's a metaphor, and that her importance in your life is the same as everything else combined, but i would really rather hear what it is specifically that makes her so special. Tell me if she gave you children, or the best sex of your life. Tell me if she comforted you when your dad found out he had cancer. Tell me if she encourages you to chase your dreams and does everything in her power to make your life great. Finally, tell me all this without using the word "love" anywhere, at all, in the whole poem after the title. THAT makes a good love poem.
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Re: I Love You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Bruce on
Wednesday, 2nd May 2007 @ 03:08:43 AM AEST (User
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Very nicely done. Nice to be in love. |
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Re: I Love You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ramfire on
Wednesday, 2nd May 2007 @ 06:02:08 AM AEST (User
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Poem is very expressive of your feelings.
I like the lines: "More like a solar eclipse
From time to time
Beyond the sun Moon and Stars."
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Re: I Love You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Absent on
Thursday, 3rd May 2007 @ 02:00:59 PM AEST (User
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Great poem, I know the feeling. |
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Re: I Love You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Lele on
Sunday, 6th May 2007 @ 12:05:11 PM AEST (User
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It's one more love's poem I read,
It's one more love's poem I read,
It's one more love's poem I read...
But it'll never be enough for my delight.
good job. |
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