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The Sleeping Beauty
Contributed by
vallie_val
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Sunday, 29th April 2007 @ 10:42:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
insomniac
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Dawn is coming, biting all the chocolate of the night
I feel I'm so sick of dreaming, dreams just rain on me and dry
Every night instead of sleeping I'll reach out and touch the sky
I'll leave fingerprints all over every cloud, I'll make them mine
Still untouched by me, this foam of clouds keeps swallowing the stars,
Traps them tangled up in smoke like they're giant sky cigars,
I could be a star myself, one of the brightest on display
But I have always been too shy to pierce the dark with my own rays
Well, in fact, I think you always had a lot more light than me
See, I've got my own small candle but it's just for you to see
Could you take the form of vapour, that would be the air I need
If you melted, I would mix you with my blood and never bleed
I will leave the curtains cracked so you can see my window's light,
Realize I'm not asleep and maybe then you'd wonder why,
You'll come round and ask a question, "Do you want a lullaby?"
And I'll sigh, "I'm sick of dreaming!...I want something REAL this time".
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Re: The Sleeping Beauty
(User Rating: 1 ) by Lele on
Sunday, 29th April 2007 @ 12:22:05 PM AEST (User
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A very good poem - perfect quarters, inner rhymes and 'interpoled' rhymes - with a very measured stanzas. |
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Re: The Sleeping Beauty
(User Rating: 1 ) by satanssecret1369 on
Monday, 30th April 2007 @ 12:35:49 AM AEST (User
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These words seemed to capture the way I've been feeling recently...
Very well done. I'm nearly speechless.
--DJ-- |
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Re: The Sleeping Beauty
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 30th April 2007 @ 01:45:51 AM AEST (User
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Yes .. a true testament to the torment of dreaming that unfulfilled dream.
In dreams we can have all we ever thought we wanted ... I say, "thought",
because there are times when the dreams that don't come true, turn
into neglected dreams that become all that we could have hoped for,
but never dared think about. I hope that makes sense. lol
Never stop dreaming .. even when it hurts, because ultimately it
is through dreaming that our want, desire and needs are manifested
into something truly and beautifully REAL!
Love the imagery in this and the sentiment is a torment that many
can relate to. Wonderfully expressed.
~Breezy |
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Re: The Sleeping Beauty
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Monday, 30th April 2007 @ 05:50:23 AM AEST (User
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a creative clever write....
love n' hugs nessa |
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