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One Tree
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deadheadpoet
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Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 01:14:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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It seems to have become so much
So very heavy of a burden to bear
I try not to let it weigh heavy on me
Yes, I try not to show I care
Each morn I try and wake with a smile
I make an attempt to forget the pain
But like a hot iron in the fire
These woes seem branded in my brain
I oft wonder how much one can take
As they muddle through a life
Numerous slaps in the face
Can cause a tad bit of strife
A couple of lives have already been lived
A couple of lives have died
I thought I'd give up on living
But once again I tried
It could not have been in vain
No it really couldn't be
No one has touched my life like you
We are roots deeply entwined...we are one tree
Laura Horner
4-25-07
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Re: One Tree
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by shelby on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 02:28:24 AM AEST
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Sis I so loved the picture and this poem well it speaks beyond my words, I feel it and it reaches out to me. Thus painting many emotions I clearly understand. You are such a beautiful woman and I am honored to call you friend and sister.......
love ya tons
huge hugs
always know though distant we are in miles you are but a thought away and I hold you each day tucked near my heart.
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Re: One Tree
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by Muhammadshanazar on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 03:27:37 AM AEST
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The poem is a nice living piece, it describes a continuous process of hardships which the poetess has gone through, it shows the loss of faith in life and again regained by the poetess, the life is one but we live through it with many lives and deaths. The poetess presented a matchless imagery that she and her lover are entwined roots like and inseparable entities. Language is simple but there is a poetic flow; please see the line
"So very heavy of a burden to bare"
isn't it
"So very heavy of a burden to bear'
Love and respects,
Muhammad Shanazar
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Re: One Tree
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 05:56:09 AM AEST
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~:*beautiful*:~
love n' hugs nessa
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Re: One Tree
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 06:49:51 AM AEST
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such a beautiful indepth write on lives and taking courses and enduring though trials this is a beautiful work of art. makes you think on things. awesome job
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: One Tree
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by Crow on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 10:38:26 AM AEST
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| I do love to see you writing these poems, this is awesome Laura. peace and all kinds of love to you my friend.. Vincent |
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Re: One Tree
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by myheartsvoice on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 12:30:58 PM AEST
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Yeh we just keep going 'till we die and become a kin with the earth in which the tree roots began. Very lovely my sister laura as always.
((((peace2u))))
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Re: One Tree
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by emystar on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 01:29:56 PM AEST
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Good writing girl.
the title thru me off for a minete but the write exceeded my expectation.
Big huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: One Tree
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 02:27:00 PM AEST
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Dearest sweet Laura~
I have to echo the sentiments of my fellow poet Mohammad~
I know you have been through a great deal my dear friend, you are an amazing woman with such courage, strength & determination . You will get through this hun. I know you both will. I'm a pm away my dear friend.
My heart, thoughts & prayers are with you and yours always dearest Laura~
much love & hugs *hugs*
sue m |
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Re: One Tree
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 30th April 2007 @ 01:08:41 AM AEST
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Damn girl!! This was EXCEPTIONAL!!! It screams of a devotion
and strength and LOVE outlasting the all of everything!!!! I love that.
I SO love that, sis.
The whole piece is brilliant but I truly adored the last stanza. WOW!
What a declaration .. affirmation ... statement of pure and clean
CONVICTION! You are one of the most incredible people I know,
sis, and I am so happy to call you a friend and true kindred spirit.
Your words never cease to amaze, delight and capture this heart--
sentiments very akin to my very own.
Beautiful ~
(especially that last line!! just, WOWEE!!!)
~MG |
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