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One
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Friday, 20th April 2007 @ 11:39:56 AM in AEST
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Can One forgive
can One move on?
It's such a bitter pill to swallow.
One can try...
but seems to choke
can't breathe
apneic....
Darkened clouds seem to surround thee.
Can One forgive
can One get back on the rails?
Move on
get past this
to see what the future shall bring.
Time is of the essence here
important decisions need made.
Can One forget they've been betrayed?
Can One forgive
can One trust once more?
One thought they took all the breaks
now here's one more.
No one's perfect
not like you want them to be.
One must realize we're all human
even you and me.
4-18-07
Laura Horner
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Re: One
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 20th April 2007 @ 12:14:45 PM AEST
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There appears to be a great deal of reflection in this piece, and the obvious pain seeps through the words. Even though there is no definitive response in your words here (and why should there be without much thought, on such a serious thing), I like the way you summed it up with those last two lines... They sit there so potent, demanding attention and continued thought. Good job here Laura :)
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Re: One
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by shelby on
Friday, 20th April 2007 @ 01:23:04 PM AEST
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sis,
I feel the pain within your words , so deeply emotive this write is. I hope you are ok??
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Re: One
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th April 2007 @ 10:03:35 PM AEST
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Wow heavy stuff Doris, i haven't been around for a while is everything ok with you? if you ever want to chat you can always pm me or email me on wildejohnny@hotmail.com...I'll probably make you feel worse! but hopefully just talking will help?
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Re: One
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 20th April 2007 @ 10:11:57 PM AEST
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well, i have no idea your inspiration, however, your poem is powerful, ...all i can add is that life/people/ whatever it is that has you down, we all have a choice; to mutter about it and become overly introverted, to a point it can hurt us; or choose going on one day, minute, or breath at a time, forward,
best to you..
love n' hugs nessa
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Re: One
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by Crow on
Friday, 20th April 2007 @ 10:54:10 PM AEST
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My friend life is in pieces"
"a minute to love..
"a minute to dry the tears..
I know you understand this.
excellent write. Vincent |
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Re: One
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by catz77 on
Saturday, 21st April 2007 @ 07:40:46 AM AEST
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good write
it's always hard to forgive and forget but
once you've forgiven your half way there
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