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Positively Speaking
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Thursday, 19th April 2007 @ 09:35:28 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Slit the wrists
of the one who permits
A story like this
to end without kiss
Crumpling the cup
of something abrupt
Promiscuous at best
a soul-bearing test
On a mountain we climb
learn to turn on a dime
Another moment is snatched
another thought goes unhatched
We kiss and pretend
secretly pray for the end
When the pen no longer bleeds
the poet sits bereaved
The moon casts down in frowning glows
as rain pours down in crowning blows
Sheer force of a stubborn will
hastily leads to an amateur kill.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2007-04-19 09:35:28]
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Re: Positively Speaking
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 19th April 2007 @ 10:38:30 AM AEST
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wow scorpy
You did great on this write .
Most often times its good to write and get things out .
hugs |
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Re: Positively Speaking
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 19th April 2007 @ 01:48:38 PM AEST
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Wow, this one felt like it had a few teeth in it. Written quite raw and fresh. Good stuff Scorp.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Positively Speaking
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th April 2007 @ 12:30:37 AM AEST
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| nice to read you poetry again, it was a pleasure before and it still is a pleasure ,, yur a star.. eddy |
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Re: Positively Speaking
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by shelby on
Saturday, 21st April 2007 @ 03:36:10 AM AEST
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Raw emotions, expressed as only you can do.
Incredible write
Michelle |
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Re: Positively Speaking
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st April 2007 @ 06:54:47 AM AEST
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It hovers on the edge of somehting so deep...and yet clearly within our sight.
I love the way you have presented....portrayed? this. Lets me experience it AND think about it....wonderful! |
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Re: Positively Speaking
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th June 2007 @ 06:59:30 AM AEST
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WOW!
A captivating and deeply passionately penned write. Truly excellent! The opening is brilliant and the rapid way the mood continues to grow is fascinating and wonderfully poetic. This was precisely what a well fashioned, but yet screamingly artistic and powerful poem should be like.
Most of this poem if de-lined could be used as some strong and meaningful quotes. This poem as a whole is highly quotable and important to ideas of life and love. Something I feel that should be published.
But this line though maybe not any more important than any other line was the one which effected me the most...
When the pen no longer bleeds
the poet sits bereaved
That's a true sentiment stated in the boldest of ways.
BRAVO POET THIS IS EXCEPTIONAL!
SCM |
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Re: Positively Speaking
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 6th December 2014 @ 01:37:31 PM AEST
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soul searching and pondering love, with the moon and
your pen, this has strong images that get inside one's
heart, beautifully penned!
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Positively Speaking
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by JamesStockdale on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2022 @ 03:51:16 PM AEST
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| Wonderful rhyme in perfect time... |
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