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Cross your heart and curse the sky
Contributed by
keilantra
on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 12:40:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Heard that you wrote about her today, again,
heard it was the last thing that you ever did.
Heard that you put that gun to your head
cocked and pulled it, at the crack of seven a.m
because you knew that was her favorite number.
And she’s wishing that she would have loved you better
And praying to God that you’ll be back in a moment yelling “April fools!”
And she’s not letting them bury you yet,
because she’s going back and reading you every poem
that ever had anything to do with you.
And confessing
ev.er.y. lie she ever told.
And she’s painting her nails your favorite color
and febreezing the room in your favorite scent
and she’s bought new waterproof mascara
because the tears are not yet spent.
And she curses the sky for being so clear
And she curses the school for moving on,
And she damns the radio for playing
anything but your favorite songs.
And baby, she loved you
She just never showed it right.
If there’s one regret she’ll never get over
It’s that she wasn’t there that night.
It’s that she forgot to call you because of that
Dom Pérignon (and the extra shot
of Jack Daniels.)
And when she finally lets you lay in your grave,
she’s two seconds away from climbing in
and compensating for that last night
she didn’t spend with you.
Instead she scatters notes in your coffin
filled with endless iloveyou’s in every way she knows how.
She doesn’t call back the friends that she was with that night
And she tosses out of the liquor,
drinks herbal teas instead.
And it’s going to be a long time before she goes out past midnight again,
a long time before she watches television
for fear of seeing your favorite shows.
Baby, you left her with lengthy years to be consumed with sorrow
and pictures to lay face-down.
Baby, you left her shallow,
gray skinned and glass-eyed,
plastic features with stiff motions.
Turned her into the best good girl
death could guarantee.
Copyright ©
keilantra
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2007-04-04 00:40:00]
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by doug on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 01:29:20 AM AEST
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You have a hell of a way with words
and making a point as well. The last line
was brilliant. It was cold somehow and
very harsh. Truly awesome. Something
close to this happened to one of my sisters friends. Great work , truly , doug |
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by purplestary on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 01:38:09 AM AEST
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| wow. powerfull write with awsome flow. this was absolutely amazing. what a way with words you have. thank you for posting this. |
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by purplestary on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 01:42:35 AM AEST
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| had to post another comment. i find myself re-reading this over and over...you have such true talent...when you read these words it's like being inside the story...thats how well they flow. nicely done. |
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 04:24:03 AM AEST
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Damn Kei .. you write some exquisitely powerful stuff. This was a kind of torture ..
and almost read like a play. I can hardly find the words to express how deeply this was
driven right into my core. There is so much emotion in here, of every degree. With mostly
everything you write there are so many layers of emotion and a wealth of powerful insight.
I applaud you this .. the impossibility of the situation is heartbreaking. But that you have
wrought this out from the depth and core of you, is both admirable and brave. (Of course,
not knowing whether this is imagined or not makes no difference. Either way, it's a hell of
a write and passionately emotive, hun).
You have a tremendous gift.
~Breezy |
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 04:33:07 AM AEST
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A very vivid and magnificent write to capture a ever-lingering moment of regret and, oh no! self-punishment! Kei, this is an excellent piece o' work.
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 03:37:16 PM AEST
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Kei~
My gosh girl, you have penned a power packed and very emotive write here. Your writings always leave me in awe. This had such a sadness to it my dear friend.
Those last two lines echo over and over inside my head.
You and your brilliant writing are a gift to us~
Thank you so much dearest Kei~
love, hugs & prayers,
sue m |
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 04:39:32 PM AEST
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This work is eternal luv;
reminding all of us here who have read it,
(lest the many more who in years to come, surely will)
that perhaps, 'love' might not be the quintessential component to living happily ever after..
(my deepest regrets and absolute heartfelt apologies to you, Kei for your loss, if any..
and anyone else who may be offended by my obvious lack of compassion here)
none intended-
this really speaks to me Kei..
as always-
Yours..
B
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 10:05:03 PM AEST
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This was amazing. The title caught me and I am gald that I did read this. You have talent and this poem was very well expressed and it had such feeling throughout the words. Great poem.
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 6th April 2007 @ 03:59:52 PM AEST
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LOVE the title, hun. And Sue's absolutely right... those last lines truly echo. The everything in between... is everything it needed to be (I can't even consciously tell you what I mean by that... but it seemed so right to say as much).
I echo the sentiments of the others and again find myself wanting to beg you never to stop writing. The words need you as much as you do them, I'd suggest.
Your fan,
~Snemmy |
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd April 2007 @ 04:59:17 AM AEST
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Oh my this is potent! A stiff and beautifully tragic write. The power in the poem is enormous. ENORMOUS, Kei! Wow your words never cease to amaze me, even though I always expect this quality out of you every time. I am so sorry concerning the tragic outlines of this work. You have, however expressed it triumphantly! Amazing work with wonderfully vivid lines that are hard to not read again just to feel it again with the writer. A splendid write concerning such a sad thing.
BRAVO!
- Daniel |
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Re: Cross your heart and curse the sky
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by Gothchyk on
Monday, 30th September 2013 @ 01:01:27 AM AEST
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| wow... that last line is so powerful...."Turned her into the best good girl death could guarantee"..... great write. |
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