|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
the sea
Contributed by
outdoorsman
on
Thursday, 29th March 2007 @ 06:11:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
|
Death they say is this disease.
we've searched far and wide the seven seas,
only to find no cure, no peace.
this illness, this cancer, will not cease
with windless sails and aching hearts,
we set the ship ablaze.
as the mast collapsed in fiery remains,
not one eye turned it's tearful gaze.
cherry embers perish into the emerald bay,
and as this ship does fade away,
in the distance we heard him say:
sorrow sinks in the sea tonight,
God looked away to the Devil's delight!
what a sight to see,
you fools! now you hear me...
cast not your hopes on selfish things,
for this be a metaphore, a foreshadowing .
the funeral pyre is at hand.
futile! your attempts to cure this land.
doomed are we all to squirm in death's grip!
so to the thought of immortality,
may you never again let one wish slip!
Copyright ©
outdoorsman
... [
2007-03-29 18:11:55]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: the sea
(User Rating: 1 )
by silver_crested_shadow on
Friday, 30th March 2007 @ 08:24:29 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
very nice poem great with words i especially like the part "cherry embers perish into the emerald bay"
~silver_crested_shadow |
|
|
Re: the sea
(User Rating: 1 )
by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 30th March 2007 @ 08:32:34 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Powerful imagery used to convey the message here.
Nice write
Steve |
|
|
Re: the sea
(User Rating: 1 )
by Dom on
Friday, 30th March 2007 @ 10:29:52 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
You have wrapped your musing on death in beautiful, bold imagery.
I really liked this, well written and a pleasure to read.
Take care,
Dom |
|
|
Re: the sea
(User Rating: 1 )
by heaviestcat on
Tuesday, 3rd April 2007 @ 09:04:21 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| powerful poem, thoughtful imagery but our attempts to cure the land are never futile. |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
