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Broken
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deadheadpoet
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Thursday, 29th March 2007 @ 01:02:26 PM in AEST
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I am broken
beyond the point of repair.
Broken
Splintered
in deep darkened despair.
I have but one wish
my dear, dear friends
Sweep up the broken
shards of me
and scatter them to the wind.
Penned 3-16-07 (At the time I wrote this, I was given the word "broken" to write a poem using that word. I didn't know where this flowed from, but I liked it. I soon learned that indeed things happened and I am broken.....but I shall survive.
Laura Horner
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Re: Broken
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by Neo-Theatre on
Thursday, 29th March 2007 @ 05:20:26 PM AEST
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The Neo-Theatres find this poem painful in its brevity, despite the succinct form in which it is penned.
The congruency in syllabics of lines two and five is effective.
There is always an executive seat for laura in the red round of the Neo-Theatres.
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Re: Broken
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by MisfitMe on
Thursday, 29th March 2007 @ 07:16:55 PM AEST
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You have spoken~
of being broken
Now, if you dare~
face the repairs...
& try to remember, there is always more ways to 'repair', than just, 'right or wrong' can cover.
BigLoveMuchPeace
~kerrylynne
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Re: Broken
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 29th March 2007 @ 07:53:39 PM AEST
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OMG, Laura I have written something similar
to this, but I must say you have perfectly penned every word here and you have done it
alot better than what I have. The contents of your poem leave me with such a saddened heart. Your words speak volumes to me.
Brilliant hun as is all your magnificent poetry~
love, hugs & prayers,
Dreamer~ |
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Re: Broken
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by yangdantien on
Thursday, 29th March 2007 @ 08:40:14 PM AEST
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Any interest in becoming paste in the crook of a banyan tree?
My second response was 'honey, you don't know from broken...' Standing outside her house at 3am waiting to catch a glimpse even with a head cold and the smell of Vick's vapor rub on my cell phone as I dial, dial dial...please tell your momma to call me!'
The only way to hurt someone who loses everything is to give them back something broken. Ask any aboriginal tribal person.
When we consider the woes of others ours don't look so big.
OK Your post got me going..I will stop now...
Blessings
AJ |
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Re: Broken
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by Spike on
Saturday, 31st March 2007 @ 02:02:26 AM AEST
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Hi-hi Laura,
I really enjoyed your spare wording and straightforward sentiment - it really did feel inspiring.
Isn't it wonderful how simple words and sights and feelings tap into the wellspring of our hearts and minds. its all there, just waiting for the right key.
My recent one came to me on a bus, where a passenger had his head in his hands (shameless plug, I know). Creativity is marvelous.
Spike (heading to your shores in October) |
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Re: Broken
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th April 2007 @ 05:32:29 AM AEST
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Laura, I am indeed impressed with how few words
dug into me so very deeply. Your authors notes, (both
top and bottom) held as much deep fascination and
profound provocation as the piece itself.
Well done, my little DH. Hoping you are finding your
way back to the beautiful wholeness that is you ~
*hugs*
~Breezy |
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Re: Broken
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 6th April 2007 @ 03:19:14 PM AEST
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I cannot help but begin by commenting on your author's note here (and elsewhere as well, as I recall) regarding how very much we know that we don't immediately know we know. I could not agree more. I am wholly convinced of it and likewise, I'm rather solidly certain that not one of us is ever really broken --- though, yes... it might feel as though we are at times. (And yep... it did occur to me that I'm really rather obnoxious for spouting off like this in your comment section - but alas, I cannot seem to help myself, it seems.) Listen to that part of you, Lauraloo, that knows its own wholeness and what the rest of you might need to feel as it does.
Like the others here, I am quite taken by how much punch you packed into so few words. I'm a rambler, myself... but I do certainly admire those that employ brevity well as you have done here. Nicely done, hun.
Wishing you peace,
~Snemy |
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Re: Broken
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by Ramfire on
Thursday, 19th April 2007 @ 12:08:23 AM AEST
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Tomorrow's sun with its warmth and light can make you feel a lot better. Fresh air with the sun can do wonders.
Ramfire |
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Re: Broken
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by Thespia on
Tuesday, 26th June 2007 @ 01:54:06 AM AEST
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Short, simple but powerful. Sometimes its good to just write and not think about where it comes from, that way we get beautiful works like this one!
Thank you for sharing! |
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