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Walk the Line
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 03:38:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
Nostalgic
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Was the route really that much different?
With faded map, perhaps less taken
Show me the essence of what was learned
hidden are secrets of losses yearned
Tumbling in sheets; seducing negativity
A roll in the hay enhances prosperity
When sincerity starts clenching its teeth
the truth is hidden somewhere beneath
Alive with a passion that just won't persist
submissive intentions I refuse to assist
The price extolled in youth, taxes with age
Unrelenting demons desperate to engage
And when was the time when all was well?
And who is the one this heartache befell?
Somewhat delicately, this journey moves onward
Slightly hesitant, but still trudging forward...
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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Re: Walk the Line
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 05:28:45 PM AEST
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A great job here. This is the first time I have read any of your work and I will be coming back for more after reading this. I especially liked this particular line....
When sincerity starts clenching its teeth
the truth is hidden somewhere beneath
A very perplexing line, placed perfectly in a great work. Good job!
- SCM |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by shelby on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 05:47:29 PM AEST
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this one grabs the reader right at the soul level, wonderful job.
Michelle |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 07:43:59 PM AEST
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Sweets .. that last stanza is just brilliantly crafted and
entirely moving. The hot blood that races through you
stirs up the most emotive and passionate writes, hun.
This seemed much like a process of thought, set
down in verse. You almost ask questions as if life itself is
expected to jump out and answer them!! You could be
accused of many things my friend, (the least of which is
brilliance), but stoicism will never be one!
Always a pleasure to read your exceptional writes.
~Breezy |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 10:30:53 PM AEST
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well done
I like that last line.... |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 10:46:45 PM AEST
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Dearest Scorpy~ Girl you never cease to amaze me~ You pour so much emotion in your writes and you can always make your reader feel what you want them to through your brilliantly penned masterpieces.
Moving, emotive and down right well worth the read~ Shine on Scorpy~
love n hugs,
dreamer~ |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by yangdantien on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 11:34:41 PM AEST
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The pathway to salvation is as narrow and as difficult to walk as a razor's edge."~ W.S. Maugham As it's easy to be a holy man on top of a mountain many if us "Walk the Line" as a haunted path the journey having greater value than the destination.
Bravo
Peace
Yang |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by emystar on
Monday, 26th March 2007 @ 12:46:43 AM AEST
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You've done a great job with this write, friend.
Keep up the awesome writing.
big huggs,
emy |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by brew on
Monday, 26th March 2007 @ 08:20:04 PM AEST
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As agreed with eveyone here......Yes we walk certain lines and paths which.....hmmmm..May I say is not always good, nor bad. You out did yourself, with this write. I hope which ever line you deceide. to cross....it will be straight, and go smoothly. Seems mine always, narrow and crook. LOL
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Re: Walk the Line
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by MisfitMe on
Wednesday, 28th March 2007 @ 02:28:03 AM AEST
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As a Scorpio, I'm sure you have more experience w/ the former than the latter, held herein...
"Alive with a passion that just won't persist
submissive intentions I refuse to assist
Passion & Submissive, respectively.*wink*
Seriously, I enjoy the depth of your process.
BigLove~moonmaidenme |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 3rd April 2007 @ 03:29:44 AM AEST
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This was amazing as all of your poems are. This was good and I really liked it.
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by Honey56 on
Saturday, 21st April 2007 @ 08:22:25 AM AEST
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| Great write... |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 1st May 2007 @ 04:28:23 PM AEST
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I believe your poetry always grabs me.
wonderful job on this scorpy.
hugs |
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Re: Walk the Line
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 22nd May 2014 @ 05:41:06 PM AEST
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i know where to go to read poetry that will move
me, your use of language is brilliant once more,
along with your beautiful rhyme,
hugs n' love nessa |
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