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The Cavity
Contributed by
Ratwick
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Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 01:11:19 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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its hard to tell the truth when your teeth are falling apart
id tell you what to do but the lines would break your heart
born and battled and burried then born again to rise, and fall all of those that know
its never left behind. blinded by the rear view mirror
objects ahead are getting nearer
grab the wheel my hands cant steer this
id tell you where to go but the lines on the road would crash this car
its hard to tell the truth when your teeth are falling apart
the hole is cold, dug deep for this poem
a soul was known to reside in this cavern
now silence speaks the language here
to hush the accent that echos near
"come here"......
and all that remains are names on the wall
carved by those moments fate haunts in us all
i'd tell you how to get here but the sound would break your heart
its hard to tell the truth when your teeth are falling apart
Copyright ©
Ratwick
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2007-03-25 01:11:19] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: The Cavity
(User Rating: 1 ) by needledancing on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 07:35:26 AM AEST (User
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I'm sure you have some good tunes in your head to go with this....should sound awesome. |
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Re: The Cavity
(User Rating: 1 ) by yangdantien on
Friday, 30th March 2007 @ 12:43:25 AM AEST (User
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Great job and all it needs is hook. Especially if it rocks (which it definitely does but it would work as rap)
perhaps carefully placed: "come here"......
"...and all that remains are names on the wall..."
Peace
Yang |
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