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No One Shall Ever Know All To Which This Poem Pretains
Contributed by
ferasdour
on
Saturday, 24th March 2007 @ 04:30:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
secrets
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I wandered in through these caverned halls
only to ponder through the mind
of the machine i saw
drowned in it's own fuel
dwelling in the mental perception of your kind
it was soon noticed that the damned minds
where the only humans able
to mechanize their own finds
as well as distort mental blockades
unto the purpose of restrictions of mental accessing,
mechanized and stable
as the electronic nodes of the mind of the one passed by
i could feel their mind fueling mine
granting power unto these thoughts i did deny
deep
drowning
pondering
that of the unstable
computing minds that within the darkness
resign
Copyright ©
ferasdour
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2007-03-24 16:30:03]
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Re: No One Shall Ever Know All To Which This Poem Pretains
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by Butterat_Zool on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 01:11:14 AM AEST
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It looks like you're reaching for a metaphor. I think i get it, but your intro almost convinces me that it's not worth getting. Why post on a social poetry forum if you don't want people to either criticize or praise your work. Who is your audience? If you're just archiving, a hard drive would do just as suitably and with far less restrictions.
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Re: No One Shall Ever Know All To Which This Poem Pretains
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 08:17:33 AM AEST
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Poetry must be a friend of thee
or why would one dare journey?
There are many minds and hearts in here
We summon no chastising peer.
Thanks for you write. |
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Re: No One Shall Ever Know All To Which This Poem Pretains
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by ferasdour on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 01:51:48 PM AEST
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honestly my "intro" has nothing to do with it
that was just a simple observatiioon.
and there is reason why i find it so comical.
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besides being amussed by everything. |
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Re: No One Shall Ever Know All To Which This Poem Pretains
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by zaknafein8891 on
Monday, 26th March 2007 @ 02:22:59 AM AEST
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| i agree with butterat_zool. i found it curious that your retort was containing no explanation, or much of anything. I am merly trying to be critical don't take this as me just being mean but i have to concur that after reading it, its not even worth my time to analyze, if for no other reason than simply reading the title. |
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Re: No One Shall Ever Know All To Which This Poem Pretains
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by ferasdour on
Monday, 26th March 2007 @ 08:16:02 PM AEST
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lmao hhehehehahahahahehehe
yeah.
that's the basis of it. but might i ask unto you?
twas the title not, to some extent, correct?
it is some what as how i am typing this now. i don not need to. nor realy care much iether way. but for the simple logic of teaching the thoughts within my mind is more than i shall ever need. or, like in some cases, want.
regardless, i do so wish to say, there trully was no point in me posting this. expecially not by posting that name and/or the intro type thing as to it. and this, of which i am typing now, mearly is to inform. there isn't much ways i could add secret riddles for people in these.
so please, mearly intertain yourselves with some since of you being my supeiors, and obviously not caring enough to diognose it. for it was never wanted of you to do such a thing.
it was more to get it off of just my hard drive. ; )
useless? i do think so. hehehehehe |
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