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Still Waters Glisten and Rivers Roar
Contributed by
afterb
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Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 01:49:39 PM in AEST
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Don’t ask me to be good, righteous or true
If it will serve my purpose I will try
But don’t ask of me what I cannot do
I do not freeze
I do not warm
I know how to move
I know how to thrust
That’s all there is and that’s all I do
I do not stop to see the pale sun slide
I do not pause to see the water lilies glide
I have no past no beginning no future no end
A pond may be the perfect place for love, beauty and happiness to lie
But truth is in the journey and love, beauty, and happiness are pushed aside
I am a Roaring River without banks
Without friends
Without foes
I have but one purpose to see that my water forever flows
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Re: Still Waters Glisten and Rivers Roar
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by Mesano on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 02:59:30 PM AEST
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| nice job. i really liked the last line |
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Re: Still Waters Glisten and Rivers Roar
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by Dom on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 03:14:11 PM AEST
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A lovely metaphor for life with vivid descriptions of different states of water that are brilliantly interwoven with your philosophies about life. I really liked this, well done!
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Re: Still Waters Glisten and Rivers Roar
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by Butterat_Zool on
Monday, 19th March 2007 @ 02:43:20 AM AEST
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You present an interesting philosophy here. Your points of focus are made clear and your immersion in your extended metaphor never shrouds or distorts your meaning. Well written, though I must challenge: How can you ensure that your water flows without keeping friends or making foes? Are your individual goals not subservient to the goals of the species?
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