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Lost Sunshine
Contributed by
rhei76
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Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 06:21:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Long, lost and left behind
Where sunshine hasn't shown
Just a black rose to feel the thorns
That wrap around my bones
Once heart felt, but tornmented
& now numbness has grown since that day
Long left alone, no blood pumping to this heart
Waiting for a light, some one to call me home
Where I can plant this rose and watch it grow
Maybe if I believe
I can find a shimmer of hope
So I can
I can get this blood flowing
I've just been asleep
For to long
All alone without
Some one to call me home
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rhei76
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2007-03-15 18:21:26]
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Re: Lost Sunshine
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by Sena on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 07:09:35 PM AEST
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I like it...creative and hopeful...thx for sharing.
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Re: Lost Sunshine
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 07:26:42 PM AEST
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Such infinite sadness penned here!! The loneliness expressed in each line was heartbreaking... This part here really stuck out for me:
Long left alone, no blood pumping to this heart
Waiting for a light, some one to call me home
Where I can plant this rose and watch it grow...
So forlorn... You did a great job with this write. I hope you find the sun again soon : )
~Scorp.
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Re: Lost Sunshine
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by FRANCO on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 07:40:48 PM AEST
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I like the flow in which you have presented your poem, a gleams of darkness and with a ray of hope.
Great write.
FRANCO.
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Re: Lost Sunshine
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by needledancing on
Friday, 16th March 2007 @ 02:02:02 AM AEST
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All alone without
Some one to call me home.
You are home with us and you are doing what poets do at home...share.Write and share some more.....we are like kittens waiting at home to be fed.hugs |
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