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Compassion
Contributed by
Jen_unknown_to_myself
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Thursday, 8th March 2007 @ 09:08:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Longing
That feeling of compassion
Always fleeing from me
The one thing I long for well never come to me
That soft gentle touch
To be held in his arms
And to hear the steady rhythm of his heart as my head lay upon his chest
A longing for love from one certain person
Please Justin notice this longing of mine
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2007-03-08 21:08:22] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Compassion
(User Rating: 1 ) by yangdantien on
Friday, 9th March 2007 @ 12:31:28 AM AEST (User
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I think this works without the last line which turns a poem to a plea. You have a sure ability to put emotion upon the page. Fall in love with your life, express your passions in joy and any fixation on that which does not return your love will melt into the arms of the one who does matching you love for love.
Good Job
Peace
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