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scattered thoughts
Contributed by
elle
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Tuesday, 6th March 2007 @ 09:22:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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I've tried to embrace
the feeling of letting go
but I miss you, bella
in a wild and frightening way.
What is this?
What pain so lovely?
Why can't I say good-bye?
How can you, so easily?
I've no more words.
My heart will long for you
until the white wings of death
scatter my days
and I am no more
Copyright ©
elle
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2007-03-06 21:22:10]
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Re: scattered thoughts
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by unknown_utopia on
Tuesday, 6th March 2007 @ 09:26:49 PM AEST
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short and sad
well done |
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Re: scattered thoughts
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by FRANCO on
Tuesday, 6th March 2007 @ 09:28:09 PM AEST
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A wonderful write Especially...
"My heart will long for you
until the white wings of death
scatter my days
and I am no more"
great Indeed.
FRANCO. |
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Re: scattered thoughts
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by Dom on
Wednesday, 7th March 2007 @ 02:45:30 AM AEST
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There is grief simply pouring out of this poem, highlighted by all the anguished questions. The poem is perfect in its simplicity and shortness which seem to convey your feelings outstandingly.
Well done,
Dom |
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Re: scattered thoughts
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by Janet on
Wednesday, 7th March 2007 @ 08:59:49 AM AEST
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What you've written is so full of emotion, I feel it so strongly. It is perfect---
Janet |
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Re: scattered thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th December 2008 @ 09:43:09 AM AEST
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a sad poem, but i liked it. i especially liked this bit:
My heart will long for you
until the white wings of death
scatter my days
and I am no more
spectacular.
-phil
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Re: scattered thoughts
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by Spike on
Saturday, 21st March 2009 @ 02:21:28 AM AEST
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Bloody good writing, lass. Sigh. I've been on both side of this one.Which is better? the deep pain of existance or the shallow insulation of disconnection?
ask me after a couple of heartaches. Or beers. or both.
Spike |
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Re: scattered thoughts
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by Aspirant on
Thursday, 1st April 2010 @ 12:01:16 AM AEST
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| This kind of poem can only be the product of true inspiration. |
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