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loneliness stares at me
Contributed by
priss
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Monday, 5th March 2007 @ 09:33:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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loneliness stares at me
as though she is my reflection;
she mirrors my brokenness
and all of my imperfections.
she watches me dutifully
following my every move;
her eyes upon me always
suspicious of what i'll do.
a perpetual reminder of abandon and regret
she intends to be
of all the ones who loved,
then ran away from me.
Copyright ©
priss
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2007-03-05 21:33:31] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: loneliness stares at me
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th March 2007 @ 06:36:20 PM AEST (User
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This is a feeling I'm all too familiar with, and you expressed the pain of it so well. Wonderful work. I really enjoyed this piece.
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Re: loneliness stares at me
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th March 2007 @ 12:47:29 PM AEST (User
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I shake my head in awe of the brevity of this piece that speaks volumes of "abandon and regret". Ya truly got the gift, prissy! Don't mind me, I be a cowboy put monikers t' nickname. In this case, we might be better callin' ya missy. Anyhow, whatever I call ya, I call ya a magnificent writer!
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: loneliness stares at me
(User Rating: 1 ) by sadaddy on
Thursday, 5th April 2007 @ 03:08:04 PM AEST (User
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The feeling of loneliness is felt in this read. The words of “abandon and regret” set the tone for your piece. Nicely done. May you one day find the peace and joy that you seek in your heart once again.
sadaddy
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Re: loneliness stares at me
(User Rating: 1 ) by Spike on
Monday, 9th April 2007 @ 08:27:21 PM AEST (User
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Spot on, priss. The last rhyming couplet was the icing on the cake.
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