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Fading Creature
Contributed by
unknown_utopia
on
Sunday, 4th March 2007 @ 12:38:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Got a feeling
Something is changing
the scene's rearranging...
I am no longer fooled
I finally see the real you
and what you are
is a insecure
love making heartbreaking creature
and I
no longer need you.
Once you had the power
and I was captivated
you drugged me
and had me deeply sedated...
I could see liquid flow
from your lips
as you were talking,
but now my eyes are open
I can see is the horror
and all I wanna do is scream.
You are not smiling now
and soon you'll be like a ghost
slowly fading
a long lost memory
undulating
back into the shadows.
Copyright ©
unknown_utopia
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2007-03-04 00:38:39]
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Re: Fading Creature
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by FRANCO on
Sunday, 4th March 2007 @ 08:19:20 AM AEST
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Life is an on going Process of trial and error, when you know your have taken a wrong turn common senses is that we turn back to find the right path. I liked the verses when you say...
"Once you had the power
and I was captivated
you drugged me
and had me deeply sedated...
I could see liquid flow
from your lips
as you were talking,
but now my eyes are open
I can see is the horror
and all I wanna do is scream."
Great write.
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Re: Fading Creature
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by Whisper on
Thursday, 8th March 2007 @ 01:13:41 AM AEST
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It sounds like a life lesson. Good choice of words to describe what you want the reader to feel.
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