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Ode to Feeling
Contributed by
yangdantien
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Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 03:03:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Beds hold seismic events
thinly registered
by wavering arms.
A Bonsai trimmed
fashioned from shaved dimes,
assembled in detail with
maple sap,
bled from the liver
of Prometheus,
brave bucket awaits
upon the Titans crag.
This minutiae, a hobby,
loves labor,
certain women view through
passion glasses for
such attentions can transfer
to heart as hoped
against a game player alert,
rather by allure
not bait taken,
pulses quicken, legs spread.
Resting 'tween the rounds
a discussion of sighs
in polite waltz;
who is this person
through which good
feelings abound?
A dogs skin shed
to silk bind us:
Exploration by edge of lips
following breath in reconnaissance.
Warm stares,
mind to cells,
in lengths to limbs,
collecting orphan geese,
donning their wings,
to migrate in bumps.
A kiss upon lids,
thick fingerprints mingle
a fine sandpaper grit,
to pearl the skin
aligns to each thrust,
stopped,
just to sit in grip,
clench, release,
forearms marry flesh.
Einstein & baseball
fade, replaced
with awe
appreciating
the beauty of your
luscious depths in Union.
Before you
I twitched,
after each
time of carnal
intimacy,
short trip to the
market for
Putanaesca and Hagen-Daz
there would always be
another cute leggy babe
on line, loins would stir
in stark disbelief,
a dirty disloyalty.
Why?
How?
I was just, oh so knee deep,
as the flesh knows the flesh
perhaps why so many signal to
cheat.
With you I am fragment no more
as you said it first;
able to admit
women are better
at living then men.
Such brave aliveness
I can hardly breath
feeling the power of you
in bone crushing grip
with fleet of bruises,
in harmony trails,
to propose on the sheets.
Let us marry in every city,
joined in every country of the world,
in every state exotic,
altered perceptions conjured.
A wedding a week first on wine
next on vodka
then on orange cough syrup,
with years for blends,
till in every corner,
and moment of being
our vows are pledged.
Blessed at rest
we tell tales
of being one
with all the Earth.
AJPIII
Copyright ©
yangdantien
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2007-03-01 15:03:59]
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by MisfitMe on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 03:58:50 PM AEST
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I now dub thee...thief of my breath! Wow!!!
I really appreciated the preface as it lent itself to more readily achieved understanding than I sometimes find w/ your writes
Breathtaking, or did I already say that?*wink*
Love~me |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by FRANCO on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 06:02:50 PM AEST
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Friend you are truly amazing, the perfect choice of words to give shape to your thoughts; I had to admit that I admire you with great respect.
FRANCO. |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Friday, 2nd March 2007 @ 07:27:32 AM AEST
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This was just an amazing poem and held so many truths. You have a way with words my friend. This was a very good poem. I am glad that you wrote this.
Take care
Christina-xo |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by needledancing on
Friday, 2nd March 2007 @ 01:23:54 PM AEST
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| Well Well Passion and fire within and such a dance of courtship with erotic words. Very well done indeed The supermarket trip reveals how man does trully lust the female anatomy.Well done my friend |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 2nd March 2007 @ 03:21:21 PM AEST
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Good grief man! This, I must say, was so very bold. (In a good way). That opening line is
intensely profound and yet so plainly simple!
There is a tremendous wealth of information and opinion packed in here and all of it, I can
well relate to, (as, I suspect can most). Only through the experience of years can we, as
humans come to understand and respect the differences our genders command. Perhaps
even (dare I?), respect those differences. Of course, you could not have told me that
when I was first entering adulthood. (I had it all figured out! lol *wink*)
I loved this .. so much of the observations here should be obvious .. but alas, they are not.
respectfully,
~Breezy |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by shelby on
Sunday, 4th March 2007 @ 12:12:19 PM AEST
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What a pleasure to read such a breath taking write. I am happy I stopped by to do a bit of catching up. Now I must go try to catch the breath that I lost whilst reading this passion and wisdom filled write. Whewwwww!
huggers
Michelle |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by trueecho on
Sunday, 4th March 2007 @ 01:00:50 PM AEST
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wow..a first read yields imagery and shadows..what could einstein and baseball mean..i want to know more..very nice
trueecho |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 5th March 2007 @ 12:50:45 PM AEST
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I often find myself reading, re-reading, and returning again to your words ... I don't think I ever turn away with the same perspective. I find your posts ... frequently challenging, to attempt and apply some sense of "me" to. There may be bits or pieces, scattered ... at times, within them that I comprehend but not on a regular basis. Here though ... I was very able to relate. I rather liked the images and word choices. Well done (in my opinion).
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th March 2007 @ 07:39:34 PM AEST
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WOW.
All I can say... |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 7th March 2007 @ 11:13:15 AM AEST
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Superb piece of writing, once again. Your thoughts, your deep feelings and emotions constantly leave me in a state of intrigue. Your mind my friend, is so open, so free , and the reflection of your soul shines with each and ever word you pen. Brilliance. Thanks for sharing. I so loved this piece.
Peace and hugs,
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th March 2007 @ 08:01:50 AM AEST
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| I am speechless... You are an AWESOME writer!!! I loved this intimate little poem |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by artjunkiekyle on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 02:22:27 PM AEST
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absolutely beautiful. i love the rawness of it all.
-kyle |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 04:12:19 PM AEST
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Well! Not your typical "love" poem by any stretch of the imagination!! But, of course that's what kept me transfixed from the first line, to that spectacular ending, and what left myself (and the other lucky readers) intrigued enough to post a comment. I'm not sure what possessed you to visit my account page in the first place, nevermind venture there time and again, but I feel incredibly honoured to have a talented poet such as yourself taking an interest in my meagre writes!!
~Scorp.
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 23rd March 2007 @ 03:48:34 AM AEST
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Thanking you so much for sharing your extraordinary poetry with us dearest AJ~
I have , but one one to sum it all up:
F
L
A
W
L
E
S
S
With the utmost respect & admiration~
Eternal_Infinite_Dreamer |
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Re: Ode to Feeling
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by venkat on
Saturday, 24th March 2007 @ 01:30:13 AM AEST
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Filled with great excitement..
Beautiful conclusion..Venkat |
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