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To a girl
Contributed by
Rhei76
on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 09:10:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I don't care
I'm not trying
I don't need a friend
I don't care
If you let me in
If you do
I will be here
If you did
I retract what I said
If you don't
If you don't
Well all is fair
I'm not trying
Cuz I care
That's my pain
If you did
I would tear
Fall down and break the walls
Learn to encumber everything
For your world
Cuz, I seen something
In your life
The way you are
I wonder but not to much
I don't want to stay
I don't want to stay
So I'm not trying
You know I just moved here
And it was by kindness that you met me
I am just a sulk
Listen to
I don't know
But if it was you
I can't say
All I remember
Is I don't want to stay
Get a ****** *** job
Earn some money
Go back home
I'm not
I'm not
Going to fall for you
I won't unless you do
I try not to think so much
When it is you
I say don't let it be
I'm tearing down walls
Knowing I need to go home
So strange
with this being the place I start
I feel 3 hours away from my life
I torn down walls
Drank a lot of alcohol
And when I get here
I find you
I want to go
I can not stay
But when I look at you
I don't know about tomorrow
Copyright ©
Rhei76
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2007-02-25 21:10:27]
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Re: To a girl
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by myheartsvoice on
Monday, 26th February 2007 @ 01:53:40 PM AEST
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This > " So strange
with this being the place I start
I feel 3 hours away from my life" was a most compelling line. In all very direct and quite powerful. nicely done.
Ben
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Re: To a girl
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 07:24:41 AM AEST
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This was really good. I liked the way that you wrote this and set up each line. It made the reading fun. I think that you did a wonderful job expressing yourself here. And I have to agree those lines were really amazing.
Take care
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