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Smart Mountain Folds.
Contributed by
FRANCO
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Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 12:28:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
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The yellow rays of the setting sun
embraced the lush green meadows,
painting them into a glittering gold.
A lass afar sang the song for her toiling beloved,
late in the fields, blended smoothly
the jingling bells of ecstatic herds on return.
Children played and danced with joy
to the tune of liberty,
but sat a child in a corner with
pearls of tears trickling
over her pale cheek, bearing a puzzle
in her eyes, gazed skeptically
at her father with qualm
in her heart, she tingled.
“Papa, the mountain far beyond
where flocks graze, whispers strange things
back at - me calling upon aloud. Deep down the
dark pit rises the rolling voice grumble’s
back that I am not, impish words
that I had uttered, the valley call’s
the same in return, that I am not.”
“Gem ‘o’ daughter, that‘s the way of life is;
thou shall receive what thy offer, wise nature’s
mountain folds enlightened thee, by humming
back thy own impish song in ripples.”
-FRANCO-
Copyright ©
FRANCO
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2007-02-25 00:28:16]
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by emystar on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 12:37:05 AM AEST
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Awesome writing. my friend as always.
big huggs,
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by MisfitMe on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 12:51:33 AM AEST
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Wow & double wow for this counts as a twofer, as I'm reading it w/ a friend & we agree the vivid imagery invoked by your masterful wording is just...wait a minute I already said this, oh well, too late to stop me now, WOW! Lol
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by Dom on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 04:00:12 AM AEST
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An interesting way of looking at nature and children. There are some beautiful images in this poem, I particularly like the first three lines, I can just see that sunset!
Dom |
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 06:10:08 AM AEST
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| How beautiful my friend...you never cease to amaze me....this is fresh from the gentle breezes that whisper across the mountains and tapestry of the skies...scooped up by your pen and transfered to paper.Well done |
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 10:31:40 AM AEST
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I adore that you've dropped this in the "Children's Poetry" category. Without a doubt, successful children's poetry is that which prods young minds to think further. This, I'm certain, would do so.
My own daughter's bookshelf is littered with Seuss, Silverstein, Lansky, Prelutsky and the like... fun stuff that gets the imagination going and makes the moral go down a la Mary Poppins ("a spoon full of sugar" and all that). But, as much as I adore that sort of children's poetry (and I am a huge Seuss fan!), I do fully believe that "good children's poetry" is simply good poetry. It needn't be child-like to be engaging, entertaining and educational to a young mind. Moreover, to assume that it need be, is, I think, an awful oversight. It is for this very reason that I, too, share "grown up poetry" with my daughter. And it is, frankly, why I like this piece very much.
Wonderful piece with a terrific close. I enjoyed this!
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by wizard on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 10:58:55 PM AEST
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wow...this is truly a great piece...nice job!
wiz |
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by GingerB on
Monday, 26th February 2007 @ 07:30:21 PM AEST
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What a masterpiece you have painted here, Franco. I absolutely love this!!
Hugs
Ginny |
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by derb on
Thursday, 12th April 2007 @ 11:30:22 AM AEST
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| nicely done. powerful writing. |
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd April 2007 @ 08:38:17 AM AEST
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Oh Franco, what a beautiful lesson ... and done with such masterful
imagery. I indeed adore this!!
How simple, and yet so profound. It has my heart astonished into a
resounding WOW!!
Well done, dear poet. Beautiful write. Truly beautfiul.
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 29th May 2007 @ 01:34:48 AM AEST
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enchanting and sweetly sooo beautiful...
love n' hugs nessa
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Re: Smart Mountain Folds.
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by DeeMeister on
Sunday, 10th June 2007 @ 11:26:28 PM AEST
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| An interesting and lovely poem. |
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