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the Lyrical Lie
Contributed by
Phantomvampyress
on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 10:10:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Bleeding from trees
as you cut they scream
oh, can't you see the neverending battle
fought through out life?
Pick up the knife
stab someones life...
rip it to shreds
bring up the demon
the stampeding enemy
of hatred that everyone denies
Spitting up vengence
slit out a tounge
hurt someone again
drag them down
you are the only one that feels no remorse
let their venom takes it over played course
tired of fighting
tired of lying in shame
where to place all this blame?
do you stand with the crowd
or imprision your own thoughts to appease
screw all the money
when you got all power to make someone need.. you
Drench them in your falsness
playing on sympathy
their lost in your decitful symphony
droning and crooning its lyrical tune
you saw to the promise knowing
everything is a lie
***JENNI***
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Phantomvampyress
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by Bleedthelove on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 10:25:14 PM AEST
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| "Do you stand with the crowd or imprison your own thoughts to appease"....I love those lines. This is an awesome piece in every way. Excellent job. |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by yangdantien on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 11:26:44 PM AEST
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I like how this starts dark with images I too have felt upon cutting into a tree then turns vile to finally end in a truth that takes a bite out of life.
Well Done
Peace
Yang |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by musicXisXlife on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 02:38:16 AM AEST
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| This has so much power...it's excellent. Keep up the good work. |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by Loriann on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 10:09:51 AM AEST
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This was amazing. I really loved it. Excellent job. Please keep up the good work I love to read your poems.
Loriann |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by seafire on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 04:32:20 PM AEST
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wow this was so good like i have told you many times before you are an excellent poet keep on writing i love to read your poems as you know though great job jenni
love ya bunches
mom |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by myheartsvoice on
Monday, 26th February 2007 @ 02:22:06 PM AEST
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some new poems i see and beautiful they are glad to see them and read them keep up the great writting Jenn like the presentation of them also.
Ben |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by dougnut on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 11:42:01 AM AEST
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Jenni, This is just awesome Poetry
Congratulations. Kudos.
Hugs from Doug :-) |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 12:58:33 PM AEST
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This was an amazing write. You are very talented and I like reading your poems because I can relate to them and the emotions. This was dark and emotional and just a bit of everything. Great poem.
Take care
Christina-xo |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 10:43:44 AM AEST
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Goodness, Jenni .. there is so much emotion in here.
I see an anger here risen from (what seems to me to be)
a promise of change and hope and then having that
ripped from the soul's heart. Yet in all the hostility, I
also feel a saddness. Saddness for what could be
and isn't. (Whether it's spherical in it's application or
more centralized to one or more people).
this was so incredibly thought-provoking and emotive.
excellent post!
~Breezy |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 06:55:51 PM AEST
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You need to stop listening to that death metal stuff...lol ; ) This is very vivid in imagery and emotion... you have an edge to your poetry that wouldn't work for everyone, but it works quite well the way you manipulate words and just cut to the chase with their meaning. Love it!
~Scorp. |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 28th March 2007 @ 01:54:57 AM AEST
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Jenstar~
A real thought provoking, sad & emotive write.
You have a unique style of writing and I have come so much to enjoy reading your wonderful poetry. Always with such depth & meaning. Keep penning girl, you rock~
much love n hugs,
sue m |
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Re: the Lyrical Lie
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 24th April 2007 @ 01:40:22 PM AEST
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yuesh.....
love n' hugs nessa |
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