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Motion

Contributed by untitled on Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 09:20:55 PM in AEST
Topic: Suicide



red
the beautiful spill
it puts me in motion
i feel it flowing in me,
my vains
streaming
gentily along
on motion

i stop this motion

this orderly, disgusting motion
i break it
it gushes,
spurting out
of order
i put it in proper motion
i feel a different motion

it isn't pain

it's proper motion

i don't want inproper motion
one after the other.
a scadule
numeral, alfebetical
i'ts discusting
improper
unlifelike

life isn't one after the other
it's ramdom
so when i feel this unrandom
improper order
i set it in motion
proper motion

i cut, till it's proper




Copyright © untitled ... [ 2007-02-20 21:20:55]
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Re: Motion (User Rating: 1 )
by Rhei76 on Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 10:37:04 PM AEST
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Love the statement at the start.

You did well on this

I have found that this topic just spills onto the page. And what you have is a nice structure of emotions flowing to the top. most arent dark
but I feel there's no shade without light.


Re: Motion (User Rating: 1 )
by Live2Die on Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 10:43:37 PM AEST
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I feel as though much of the poem is lost because of the use of improper spelling...but I'm just a stickler for spelling.

Otherwise, I love the poem. The idea and emotion you have simply spreads itself along the page, flowing through the words.

Nice write.




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