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Who Can I Cry To?
Contributed by
Pebbles345
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Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 07:10:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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My mind is scattered
Like fallen leaves.
My pain is clear
Like broken dreams.
Why, oh, why am I not at ease?
This creeping depression that never ceases
Leaves my soul in tattered pieces.
Who can I cry to?
Who can I love?
The Holy Spirit,
The God above...
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2007-02-20 19:10:49]
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Re: Who Can I Cry To?
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 08:37:25 PM AEST
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A very good effort and first post. Devotional work is very moving. Please keep writing and posting and thank you for sharing this here.
Peace
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Re: Who Can I Cry To?
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 08:42:28 PM AEST
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I really like this piece alot.. it starts off so sad and then the ending is like hoping in God beauitfully done
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Re: Who Can I Cry To?
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by MickeyPigKnuckles on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 11:20:28 PM AEST
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Pebbles345, First, I want to welcome you here and I am glad you have decided to share your talent with all of us here. I am impressed with your first poem as it has the elements of good poetry as it contains a message and has some structure with emotional meaning. What a beautiful way to start writing poetry by the choice you have made here with your faith in our creator. Thank you for sharing this with us all and for giving us all a little of you. Please keep your pens ink flowing so your awesome words of poetry keeps growing.
Mickey Pig Knuckles
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Re: Who Can I Cry To?
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 21st February 2007 @ 05:06:37 AM AEST
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Welcome and great writing.
huggs, smiles,
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Re: Who Can I Cry To?
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by SilverRain on
Thursday, 17th April 2008 @ 06:12:43 PM AEST
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| good first write |
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