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Ordinary Day
Contributed by
spike
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Monday, 19th February 2007 @ 07:17:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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I made it to the bus stop
and took a bite of my bagel
before the first tree said ‘Hello’.
I nodded and said ‘Hi’ back,
but all it talked about was
dirt and birds, and how the
five circles of Gaia are getting
overcrowded with shrubs (boring!!)
On board, I brushed aside the faeries
and managed to find a seat that
didn’t have traces of gold dust and verdigris
- that stuff really sticks, and
marks you for goblin spells.
School was so-so;
a few transformations
between Math and Gym,
and a half-hearted dimensional
shift from the Land of Shadows
but otherwise, just one ordinary day
- although the burnished fire-dragon at
sunset was pretty cool…
Copyright ©
spike
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2007-02-19 07:17:53]
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by Dom on
Monday, 19th February 2007 @ 07:40:05 AM AEST
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This really made me smile, so thank you! I completely agree with the sentiment and I love the tone in the last stanza.
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by PhantomVampyress on
Monday, 19th February 2007 @ 11:12:19 AM AEST
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wow the sunset part is awesome.. sunsets always make my day and i loved the imagery on this penned out piece.. awesome job
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th February 2007 @ 03:23:41 PM AEST
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I like it!
Brushed magic across an ordinary day....ahhhhhh |
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by brew on
Monday, 19th February 2007 @ 03:28:22 PM AEST
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Subtle and very interesting, write......Last 2 lines were great. Keep posting on.
Brew~ |
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by needledancing on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 11:20:05 AM AEST
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| I envy you the in sight that to take that boring day and turn it into mystical, fairie and goblin wisdom ...well what can one say but write some more....more....more Thanks. |
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 03:04:16 PM AEST
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Can't wait 'til October, Spike when I can hear these words outa yer own mouth. This was magnificent and fun to read aloud!
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by MisfitMe on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 05:15:34 PM AEST
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Anything, but, ' ordinary ', my dear. This was absolutely Enchanting!!!
I really enjoyed this!!! In fact, goin' fer anudder look~see now, teehee...
Great Write!
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 07:12:53 PM AEST
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A well formed delivery and blend of the magical and ordinary worlds creating this extraordinary piece. Well Done and Bravo may your pen ever flow.
Peace
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 21st February 2007 @ 05:22:45 AM AEST
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Greetings dearest Spike,
What a pleasure it is to read your outstanding work. From a dull ordinary day you transform it into one mystical & enchanting one~
- although the burnished fire-dragon at
sunset was pretty cool…
The last two lines are awesome.
Magical and enchanting~ Thanks for sharing your extraordinary work with us~
love n hugs,
sue m |
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 07:30:34 PM AEST
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S .. this was grand! (sorta Harry Potterish, if you don't mind
the comparison). I loved the "matter-o-fact" way you wrote this.
Your diversity is truly amazing, spike. I never tire of your writes
and I think part of that is because it is always new. (I sometimes
think I must getting dreadfully boring .. ) It's good to stretch
our wings and push our boundaries, methinks. And boy!
You DO just that poet. BTW .. I too, was mesmerized
by the last line ~
*Loves this!*
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Re: Ordinary Day
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 10:29:14 AM AEST
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Ah,Spike,that mind of yours is something else,it really is.The 'boring' in brackets was a real tickle for me,led me back to another of yours,'Growing Pains',a couple of lines in brackets in that poem were just the business.
Sitting here shaking my head in appreciation.Well done ,mate,
Den |
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