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Stagnant and Unbalanced
Contributed by
jyssvw22
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Friday, 16th February 2007 @ 04:32:02 PM in AEST
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Most of us know better then to allow a second stab at our hearts
One would assume the former rather then the later is a preferred place to part
Coming up from within the insides are these feelings from my gut
With dirty words and pretty birds
Love is finally cast as smut
Some of us would prefer to go on living as if it didn’t exist
While we all know more then we should and less then we ever wished
When we give too much of our soul away we disallow for innocence
With smiling faces and tongues tasteless
The truth awaits
The majority of us claim we have been to the place before
We have seen our wickedness and have pledged to do more
When we take from each other the things we all cherish at once
With open hands in grains of sand
We all turn to dust
A collective us has set in stone the principle protector of good
As we learn to speak in secret languages until we are understood
When we reach the plateau of greatness we have only begun to loose
With closed minds and nothing but time
Nothing moves
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jyssvw22
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Re: Stagnant and Unbalanced
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by Bleedthelove on
Friday, 16th February 2007 @ 08:40:27 PM AEST
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| This is amazingly written. The first line really hit me hard and got me thinking. Excellent job. |
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Re: Stagnant and Unbalanced
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by brew on
Friday, 16th February 2007 @ 10:21:05 PM AEST
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100%..............Agreed.........How come SOME of us KNOW........maybe bc we have been through it..? Hmmmmmm, I have to say, maybe its bc NOW, I have tried to convience, one, EXACTLY what ya just penned.........HA......they think Im nuts.! Go figure
Great post. as usual.
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Re: Stagnant and Unbalanced
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 17th February 2007 @ 01:12:07 AM AEST
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This is quite the introspective piece --- very thought-provoking for the reader, and I'm sure even for yourself as you penned it. Lots of great lines in here, and a certain degree of wisdom presides. Excellent piece jyss! I think this is great.
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Re: Stagnant and Unbalanced
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 17th February 2007 @ 11:43:01 PM AEST
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Well said jyss..
as ever, your candor is most admirable..
brutal and painful honesty, as only you set forth-
B |
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Re: Stagnant and Unbalanced
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th March 2007 @ 04:48:44 PM AEST
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wow .. jyss there is infinite and PLAIN truth within these words.
(I was agast at reading them, in fact, but you state facts most
of us have revealed through our own hearts).
That last stanza affected me especially-- like a stab wound
to the heart. An almost hopeless emotion that makes us wonder...
Great post!
~Breezy |
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