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Falling
Contributed by
yangdantien
on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 04:02:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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A poem polished lens
fashioned into
corrective x-ray glasses:
All of us are Rainbow
spines sheathe in fascia.
Morbid parts brought
to light,
glow with nacre,
mother of pearl
rubber bands, spit
with tact, holds us together
by tender strings.
Each a cache of curves
aligned in grace
to be ever moving
on this planet
in their region.
Sitting or
laying flat,
every part
cells in motion,
moving as falling bodies
while spinning a thousand
miles and hour.
Ergonomically designed
chairs and beds
for comfort or style
take into account
this ballet of gravity.
As kissing is breath
exchanged.
Thou Heart
truly inhaled deeply.
We say it is
falling in love
yet lines anchored
in floating resists
to become sailing along.
AJPIII
Copyright ©
yangdantien
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Re: Falling
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 04:18:08 PM AEST
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this is a well penned creative write.. I liked the flow and the wording awesome job
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Re: Falling
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by Naughtygurl on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 05:26:50 PM AEST
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| rAnDoM ♥ |
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Re: Falling
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by Whisper on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 06:36:54 PM AEST
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omg your good. Nice special effects on the illustration. Interesting concept of being particles in a spectacular vast ocean of even more particles in the span of a moment. Nice work
Good imagination on the art.
Whisper
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Re: Falling
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by MisfitMe on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 08:00:36 PM AEST
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"As kissing is breath
exchanged.
Thou Heart
truly inhaled deeply."
To understand this...is to experience the depths of intimacy only achieve through true surrender...
RealLove~your 'me'
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Re: Falling
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 10:51:11 PM AEST
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Upon first read, I imagined this as just the falling
of a person .. (into emotion of ANY sort really .. )
but getting to that last stanza, the clarity is
astounding .. who can explain it?
You have a creativity that is amazingly unique..
This is beautiful AJ. Exceptionally so ~
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Re: Falling
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by FRANCO on
Wednesday, 14th February 2007 @ 01:07:39 AM AEST
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My friend, it is wonderful poem with perfect visual effect, notably with the following lines:
" All of us are Rainbow
spines sheathe in fascia.
Morbid parts brought
to light,
glow with nacre,
mother of pearl
rubber bands and spit
with tact, holds us together."
I truly enjoyed reading this poem.
FRANCO. |
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Re: Falling
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 14th February 2007 @ 10:16:45 AM AEST
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i agree with breezy with this write
that creativity that is amazingly unique
you are a very talented writer keep writing. |
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Re: Falling
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th February 2007 @ 04:12:28 PM AEST
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You have a knack fer presentation (the graphics so compliment your mastery of word). The piece itself
has a captivating presence that leads the reader's imagination to other places (seemingly not intended) and then, as Breezy said, takes us to another place with clarity. Hat's off to ya, pard!
wabl
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Re: Falling
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by brew on
Wednesday, 14th February 2007 @ 08:26:29 PM AEST
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Taking, falling to a "whole" differ, depth and place. Agreed with Roxie, and ken....there is clarity, and more. The fallen lines, combined with , such words....make the reader, fall into gaze and awe......
Great words, My friend
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Re: Falling
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by needledancing on
Friday, 9th March 2007 @ 10:33:24 AM AEST
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| Love the graphics and the suggestion we hold the eggs.....sounds like another brain fried piece of mastery....quite a file cabinet in that grey matter of yours.I'm of course teasing you....This is great writing..thanks Yang |
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Re: Falling
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 04:20:28 PM AEST
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I loved the poem and the images. When my brain is on poetry, it is like a thunderstorm raging with emotion. Great write!!!
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