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To Hell Is Where You Go
Contributed by
MickeyPigKnuckles
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Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 10:19:43 AM in AEST
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" To Hell Is Where You Go "
I remember our conversations
the way we used to talk
you broke my beating heart in two
when you slowly turned to walk
Still seeing your sweet warm smile
and your flowing hair
you always made me happy
but you didn't care
I think back to the day
I tried to end my life
no more reason to be here
I wanted my afterlife
I felt the hurtful emptiness
flowing out of me
the bloody sight was a mess
hoping you would see
This vision of my hurting life
is how you have left me
I feel so lost and all alone
its time for me to die
I have not one single tear
escaping from my eye
This pain I feel so deep inside
will never ever let go
I write this poem here for you
so somehow you will know
when you die and meet your fate
To Hell Is Where You Go!!!!!
Penned By James L. McHenry
Copyright © 2007 James L. McHenry
Copyright © 2007 By Mickey Pig Knuckles
Copyright © 2007 Mickey Pig Knuckles (All rights reserved)
Copyright © 2007 HeartFelt TM
Quote: Life Is Poetry In Motion, Great Poets Reflect Emotion
The Best And Most Beautiful Thing In The World Can’t Be Seen Or Touched
It Must Be Felt With Your Heart
Copyright ©
MickeyPigKnuckles
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Re: To Hell Is Where You Go
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 10:27:56 AM AEST
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this is a powerful painful write.. you can feel the sadness of loss in this piece it was very well expressed. but the ending is even better.. great job in expression and wording
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Re: To Hell Is Where You Go
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 11:12:18 AM AEST
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OK this was intense but leaves me with mixed feelings. Such as seeking help for the narrators problems which truly have nothing to do with anyone else. I assure you any lover of mine breaks out with a negative attempt on their life clearly they have issues and need help greater than a profession of love can give. Even a devoted unconditional love if present would justly seek intervention .
Also an afterlife everlasting for breaking hearts and bustin' chops. God we have to learn to be kind in our wishes else we suffer the fates we plan for others. For me this conclusion removed all sympathy.
Boy this got my goat, a very provocative piece.
Great job.
Peace
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Re: To Hell Is Where You Go
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by Chrissylee on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 12:22:20 PM AEST
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| its true that love hurts and when the one you want to be with breaks your heart in two you don't think you can go on or keep on going but what better way to get it all out than to put it into poetry, believe me it helps immensely i have been there before one too many times. keep pouring your heart and soul onto paper and one day when you least expect it love will come looking for you even though that isn't the way you are thinking right now.... great write |
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Re: To Hell Is Where You Go
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by Malcolmsdreamgirl on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 01:40:24 PM AEST
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WOW! Those words were FULL of pain and heartache! She really had some impact on your life ...... I feel that maybe tho in hindsight you had a lucky escape and now you are free for someone more deserving of your wonderful nature and GIFT of putting words together.... But Promise NEVER to allow anyone to hurt you again .... to that extreme .... Run Forest Run ......
Good luck
Dee xx |
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