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Swan
Contributed by
Dom
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Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 01:49:21 PM in AEST
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Graceful swan of snowy white
Cut lake’s skin like unsheathed knife.
Feathers ripple in the breeze,
Soft as pillow, pure as light.
Liquid beaded eyes glisten,
Dark, fathomless pools in mist.
Sinuous neck arched and poised,
Head turned as if to listen.
Swan-maiden sits at edge of mere
Twisting droplets from sleek, dark mane.
Unblemished skin, pearlescent peach,
Blue eyes eclipsed with anguished tears.
Twined feathers sit atop her head,
White snow-down dress caress her skin,
Supple as wind-blown reed her waist,
Stretched out on twilight’s forest bed.
Daylight’s colours fade at dusk,
Swan glides to shore and waits.
As last warmth suffused her form
To shed off daytime’s husk.
Feathers turn to fingers,
Beak retreats to nose,
Eyes swirl from black to blue,
But grace still lingers.
The swan-maiden turns a tragic dance,
Entombed in morphing cycles.
Her diamond tears raise the waters,
Into forest streams advance.
Towns flood who had forgot her tale,
Their people pray for mercy.
Left alone trapped by lake’s cool border,
Now swan-maiden sets sail.
Copyright ©
Dom
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2007-02-12 13:49:21]
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Re: Swan
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by trini on
Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 03:58:35 PM AEST
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I like this i think you repsented swan lake very well. Overall very well written you had really good flow between words.
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Re: Swan
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 06:57:04 PM AEST
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I really liked how you've penned this. I love Swan Lake and the story behind it. You have done an excellent job with this. Well done and thanks so much for sharing this wonderful piece of poetry with us~
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Re: Swan
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by yangdantien on
Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 10:40:38 PM AEST
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Ah there is a ballet in these words. White tufts of lace ripple in grace and glide.
Well Done
Peace
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Re: Swan
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by needledancing on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 09:19:46 PM AEST
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| Lovelly words to discribe the swan and all its beauty. |
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Re: Swan
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by myheartsvoice on
Sunday, 4th March 2007 @ 08:58:11 AM AEST
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Beautiful work. Most enjoyable to read. the transition from one point toanother, great
continuity and presentation.
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Re: Swan
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by ashleigh on
Tuesday, 6th March 2007 @ 05:20:10 PM AEST
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Very beautifully written. Thanks for posting this, it was a pleasure to read!
Ash |
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