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Bury the ache
Contributed by
Phantomvampyress
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Wednesday, 7th February 2007 @ 07:10:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
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feel the ache
that makes me take a step back in time
to hit rewind
remember this....
all you want .. is what you haven't saved
so turn around
to that once familiar sound
filling the void where control was once lost
the mistakes
that bleed
bury your thoughts
with all of the ashes that remain
Vampyress Jenni
Copyright ©
Phantomvampyress
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2007-02-07 19:10:40]
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Re: Bury the ache
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by MickeyPigKnuckles on
Wednesday, 7th February 2007 @ 07:21:08 PM AEST
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Phantomvampyress, OMG Woman, you are so gifted and one I truly admire and find myself eagerly awaiting your next composure. Ummmm Jenni, you may not know this but you have many fans and I think I may be becoming your biggest. Great Poem.
Thank You for being You and especially for sharing yourself with all of us.
Always appreciate your warm comments :)
Mickey Pig Knuckles
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Re: Bury the ache
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 7th February 2007 @ 08:26:29 PM AEST
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Out of the black & blue tumbles the line:
"...the mistakes
that bleed..."
and leaves this reader justly bruised through the sport of comprehension. Your use of language demon straights an etiquette which is very rich dear Sanguinarium, I would say you do promote chivalry, honor, style, with creativity.
Arise & Awaken
AJ |
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Re: Bury the ache
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by seafire on
Wednesday, 7th February 2007 @ 09:25:46 PM AEST
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jenni i really like this poem yes if we could rewind our lives i wish i could and change a few things in life. this is truly a great write and i am really proud of you .
love ya bunches
your biggest fan momma |
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Re: Bury the ache
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by feralpen on
Saturday, 10th February 2007 @ 07:54:09 PM AEST
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Bram Stoker's classic 1897 vampiric novel seems to have influence with you. I too, like a compelling write.
Bury the ache reflects an insightful piece of advice to all who would seek it. Written almost in a contemporary style, it still carries a quality of mystique and leans slightly toward dark. I liked comparing 'Bury the ache' with 'bury your thoughts ... with... ashes that reamain' in your closing. Good write! |
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Re: Bury the ache
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by myheartsvoice on
Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 12:36:05 PM AEST
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This is a powerful little peice of writting. Your poems realy have impact, a sophisticated emotional intensity. It's sit's quietly and yet touches one without moving, no going through the motions here. It say's what it has to leaving one unable not to respond. Every thing you've written has it's own approach.
quite enjoyable to read.
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Re: Bury the ache
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by xDiSaStErPiEcEx on
Thursday, 15th February 2007 @ 02:50:53 PM AEST
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I have noticed that you have took time to comment a few of my poems.
Tis Appreciated.[=
So i decided to go to your page and read a few. & i really liked this one. It is very unique & well written, & i like your word choice.
Keep writing
& i'll keep reading.[=
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& KyleeLin ; |
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Re: Bury the ache
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 07:20:11 PM AEST
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Wow, this could relate to so many things, and because of that the connection I felt as a reader, was overwhelming! Thank you for sharing this one; I thoroughly enjoyed it.
~Scorp. |
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Re: Bury the ache
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 24th April 2007 @ 01:44:57 PM AEST
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rewind would be nice... interesting poem, makes me think about quite a few aspects of my life...
love n' hugs nessa |
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