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Your Life
Contributed by
Dom
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Monday, 5th February 2007 @ 06:42:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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Pray don’t cry, child –
When darkness falls,
And the monsters who live with you
Sleep.
Still alone
As you walk the silent chapters of
Your world.
To lock yourself away
Into your keep.
Lovers, best friends, parents,
They all left
You fighting solo for life –
In drowning tank
Unfathomably deep.
Never sorrows piled so high,
Yet kind courage lets you give
A smile for all the little things
The light hours of the next day reap.
Even as those waters rise,
Pray don’t cry, child,
Do not weep.
Copyright ©
Dom
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2007-02-05 06:42:48]
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Re: Your Life
(User Rating: 1 )
by MisfitMe on
Wednesday, 7th February 2007 @ 03:29:10 AM AEST
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'Still alone
As you walk the silent chapters of
Your world.
To lock yourself away
Into your keep.'
I WAS THIS CHILD...
i am this child at times...'still'...
A tearful & sincere, " Great job & Thanks for sharing! "
BigLoveMuchPeace,
~misfitme
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Re: Your Life
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by Clarity_Rising on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 03:03:56 AM AEST
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You’ve intertwined what seems
to be a wandering hero with a
troubled child. This is a very creative
move, making the character in your
poem seem brave rather than meek
and submissive. As a reader, I feel empathy
with the character with out pitying him/her.
I love the advice you give your friend, it is
very touching. The person in this poem must be very proud to have such a gifted friend. Great write!
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