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Last Thoughts
Contributed by
SacredMyth
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Saturday, 3rd February 2007 @ 09:11:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The moon like a dream
The day like a whisper
When hearts bean
And their light shimmers
I leave this body
This mortal coil
Entering a strange ordinary
With solid ground to foil
Embracing the unknowable
Clashing with reality’s retreat
Where all gods might is feeble
And his angels weep at Lucifer’s feet
Fear what you know
And believe in confusion
The night falls yet day lingers
While intrusion of meaning hinders pace
The wind howls, serenading cinders
Bringing the scent of life to smite deaths face
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Re: Last Thoughts
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by mysterium on
Sunday, 4th February 2007 @ 12:25:12 AM AEST
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| i very much so enjoy this style of writing and while I'm not sure i've fully engulfed what you're saying here, you can really get the sensation of getting lost in it as I would expect with ones passing. very interesting take on the subject and it has perhaps inspired me to give it a try |
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Re: Last Thoughts
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by yangdantien on
Monday, 5th February 2007 @ 01:47:29 PM AEST
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"...What dreams may come when we have shuffled off this mortal coil must gives us pause...
...the undiscovered country from who's borne no traveler returns makes us rather bear those we have then to fly to others we know not of." I love the alliteration to Hamlets soliloquy. But I daresay not to your preface as you will be:
"...Bringing the scent of life to smite deaths face."
A power piece to hold up against such moments.
Well Done
Peace
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