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Shift
Contributed by
rhei76
on
Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 01:57:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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To dying gods and lonely herdsmen
under skies of falling stars and acid rain
where virus and mental sickness
seep in to even the pain
of death caused by mortal man
no time for the living
the dead are choking
the peace was ravaged
and divinity melted away
to the grains of sand
that will be all dry in two million years
thank god for these four billion years or so
just enough love to start the world living
I say it's to the dying thoughts of a higher place
we have so overwhelming denied
except for when we are in church
and still not doing that right
I say to the love people preach about
but obviously don't appreciate
It's to time running out
as all things rotate
until gravity shifts
Copyright ©
rhei76
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2007-02-01 13:57:57]
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Re: Shift
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 02:15:59 PM AEST
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You certainly have a flair for conjuring up powerful and evocative images in the mind
Very creative write
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Re: Shift
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by MickeyPigKnuckles on
Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 02:42:43 PM AEST
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rhei76, I really enjoyed the images captured within my minds eye as the message becomes vividly clear. Wonderful work.
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Re: Shift
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 05:11:01 PM AEST
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A real thought provoking write excellently penned. Your message powerful and the images you cast into your readers mind are provoking. Indeed an outstanding write. Well done.
hugs n prayers,
sue m |
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Re: Shift
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by SaintzAndSinnerz on
Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 07:02:29 PM AEST
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| what an intense piece. i eanjoyed it. your very creative. |
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