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My Heaven Is Your Hell
Contributed by
The_Unknown
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Tuesday, 30th January 2007 @ 12:45:11 AM in AEST
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This place might be your Hell
But this is my Heaven
Where angels will die
And devils will be forgotten
Only the lonely will survive
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This place surrounded by fire
Just enough water to drown
Devils are quickly forgotten
Angels will die
Only the lonely can survive
This place
Could engulf you
You could lose yourself to it
Enchanted with it's lonely beauty
Gaze into the fire
As you slowly drown
Devils will be forgotten
And angels will die
But the lonely can stay
My Heaven is your Hell
Where angels die
And devils are forgotten
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The_Unknown
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2007-01-30 00:45:11]
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Re: My Heaven Is Your Hell
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by LouisaMontagu on
Tuesday, 30th January 2007 @ 04:56:54 AM AEST
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I note your comments on your work, maybe its doesnt flow so good but its your work, i think you have mastered talent and i enjoyed it. Well done, Thank u for sharing -x-
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Re: My Heaven Is Your Hell
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 30th January 2007 @ 09:27:06 AM AEST
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I like the chunky juxtaposition very much like a poetic rocker where each line is greeted with electric chords accentuating the flow. I hear Emerson, Lake & Palmer bringing this one to life with organ and cosmic presence.
More often than not these days, this is true in so many ways i.e. IT professionals standing online at the DMV with a Blackberry.(Heaven.) Walking into a Starbucks (Hell.) Just a few that came to mind instantly.
Provocative & Well Done
Peace
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