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You are to blame.
Contributed by
amateurwriter
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Sunday, 28th January 2007 @ 05:51:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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It's a strange thing, loneliness.
Just when I think I've been spared,
it finds a way to come creeping all over.
Every time, every blow, more painful than the last one.
My entire support system is just a phone call away,
and yet the fingers don't seem to find the numbers.
It is so crowded in there...
but no one's right for this situation.
wait, that's not true.
YOU are.
it's YOU.
The one I've seeked for so long.
The one that makes all the others useless.
You've put them out of work, you know...
YOU cause my loneliness.
I blame YOU.
Because no matter who I am with,
It is no longer enough.
My very core screams asking for you.
your warmth.
your music.
your colors.
Please come back.
Stay here with me.
Let's chase the loneliness away.
TOGETHER.
Don't ever part my side.
In exchange, I offer you my afternoons with a good book.
Also, the night in the bar with my favorite band.
I give you my secrets. (It's only fair)
My darkest nightmare. (It's ok, you can have it)
It's yours.
It's all yours.
Just stay here.
Don't you see it's raining outside??
Copyright ©
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2007-01-28 17:51:58]
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Re: You are to blame.
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by PhantomVampyress on
Sunday, 28th January 2007 @ 07:11:47 PM AEST
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this is a very expressive piece.. I like how you worded this.. it sounds like your hurt and can't replace a person. once you truly love its hard to replace that person if ever. very sad write.. awesome job
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Re: You are to blame.
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by purplestary on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 06:02:36 AM AEST
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| this was beautiful. i especially like the end, the way the whole peice flows right into "don't you see it's raining outside??"..nicely done. |
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Re: You are to blame.
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by JoeyTrib1550 on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 02:51:44 PM AEST
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Great write
I also thought the last line was very good
You expressed your feelings very well in here
Keep it up |
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