|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Catching Stars
Contributed by
Dom
on
Saturday, 27th January 2007 @ 06:09:15 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
|
I wish I could shake the stars out
From their midnight sky blanket
So they plummet down in blazing trails
For me to capture them in glass jars.
Each star I catch lights up another wish.
I wish I could drift along the Amazon
On a lily pad bigger than a dinner table,
With a woven willow oar to steer my course.
Feel the dappled shafts of sunlight warm my skin
Aft’ rainstorm doused it.
I wish I could lie on my back in the prairie,
The only soul around for miles,
Basking underneath the sky’s blue pool.
The grasses whispering a foot above me
As they turn green to silver sides in gust of wind.
I wish I could sail away on a pirate ship
To the gold island time forgot.
Standing on the bow with the sea spray
Tang on my skin sticking my clothes to me
Whilst the sails belly in the ocean’s drifted blow.
I wish I could stand in a blue ice grotto
Where the snow layering the floor is so smooth
It could be ground mists frozen in time.
Light curves round the cavern’s gentle blue ceiling,
Outlining the ice in white reflected off the walls.
I wish I could leave the pages of my mind
To catch the stars for real.
I wish I could live the wish I dreamed.
Copyright ©
Dom
... [
2007-01-27 06:09:15]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Catching Stars
(User Rating: 1 )
by SaintzAndSinnerz on
Saturday, 27th January 2007 @ 10:14:53 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| this is a really nice poem, i enjoyed it. great job |
|
|
Re: Catching Stars
(User Rating: 1 )
by PhantomVampyress on
Saturday, 27th January 2007 @ 10:57:14 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I like how you specified the wishes you have or this could be related to a childs wishes in their mind also.. this is a very creative piece and a very brightening one
vampyress Jenni |
|
|
Re: Catching Stars
(User Rating: 1 )
by ashleigh on
Sunday, 4th March 2007 @ 02:50:24 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| This was very sensory, I guess I could say, I really felt as though I were there when the places were being described: under the stars, on a river, in the prairie, etc. I felt the sea spray, and I felt the sun's warmth, even though it's -60 degrees in my basement. This poem was very serene. I really enjoyed it. Great job! |
|
|
Re: Catching Stars
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st May 2007 @ 02:46:18 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
What a delicious read that was.
I've taken time to read your poems
and I like them all,
Den |
|
|
Re: Catching Stars
(User Rating: 1 )
by needledancing on
Wednesday, 11th July 2007 @ 01:29:51 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This takes me back to the daydreams of school days, when thinking and wishing to be any other place than that classroom.
My desire to help paddle the big lily pad down that amazon and translate the whispers of the grasses, then to count the stars now caught in jars and make the wishes. Wow I can't find the words to show you what grace you have just walked through with this piece. |
|
|
Re: Catching Stars
(User Rating: 1 )
by tiffany1991 on
Saturday, 21st July 2007 @ 06:10:03 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Beautiful Poem.
=]
your a natural =]
maybe you could check out my poem its my first =]
thanks
|
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
