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Moving on (A SONNET)
Contributed by
desolantdreamer
on
Thursday, 25th January 2007 @ 03:02:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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My love is not loved nor cherished by you
A simple hello would've been really nice
A single 'hi' would not be very shrew
You're treating me as cold as solid ice
Unreturned love is not worth all this pain
So goodbye my love I'll leave you alone
I see there is not a thing left to gain
What is in the future to me unknown
Many years have passed now and I have moved on
Though I see you and wonder what could've been
But over you I will never again fawn
Even if you give me that goofy grin
All I know is the future is unclear
But in my heart you will never be dear
Copyright ©
desolantdreamer
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2007-01-25 15:02:16]
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Re: Moving on (A SONNET)
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by Bleedthelove on
Thursday, 25th January 2007 @ 04:57:03 PM AEST
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| Very nicely put. Good job. |
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Re: Moving on (A SONNET)
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 26th January 2007 @ 12:19:23 PM AEST
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this is a very expressive piece.. I like how you made the beginning like all you needed was a nice hello and then the ending is very well pieced.. great job
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Re: Moving on (A SONNET)
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by JoeyTrib1550 on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 03:12:55 PM AEST
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Great write, I really liked it
I even learned something from this
At first I thought you were wrong, that this isn't the pattern of a sonnet, but as it turns out there are two different kinds of sonnets, the european one, and the english one
Good work
Thanks for sharing
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