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Tequila
Contributed by
Dom
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Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 08:09:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Fizzing champagne elegant in tall flutes,
Goblets of regal bloodied wine,
Vodka shots in military rows down the bar beside
Acid cocktails with glasses like Hawaii.
He drinks them down in a heady euphoria of
Fermentation. He is loose-limbed and
Relaxed with a poison twinkle in his eye
As he hooks his victim.
A slurring mess, falling to the ground
I hold his hand in the hospital
Think I watched him kill himself
While he was blind, and busy
Shooting himself down with tequila.
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Dom
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2007-01-23 08:09:29]
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Re: Tequila
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by UrMyInspiration on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 08:19:42 AM AEST
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| Very touching and sad. Excellent writing. |
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Re: Tequila
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 09:19:56 AM AEST
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| very good words for warning |
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Re: Tequila
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 02:31:17 PM AEST
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I really liked this... "Think I watched him kill himself
While he was blind, and busy
Shooting himself down with tequila."
Excellent word choice and an origional way of presenting the bout with booze.
Very well done my friend
Larry
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Re: Tequila
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by desire on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 04:52:20 PM AEST
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| powerful.........loved it |
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Re: Tequila
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 12:42:20 AM AEST
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Dom, lots of smooth phrasing and vivid imagery in this one - alcohol and it's environs is burnt into our senses and psyche from such a young age, and the suicidal drunk in this piece is all too familiar.
S |
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Re: Tequila
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 27th March 2007 @ 07:17:02 AM AEST
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Touching, heartfelt, and sad. I liked this. You did a good job expressing your feelings and emotions. Good poem.
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Tequila
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by needledancing on
Wednesday, 11th July 2007 @ 01:33:53 AM AEST
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| Touching and powerful. An event often witnessed that leaves those left in the wake feeling powerless. Well written |
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