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You stole a bit of my soul tonight
Contributed by
EndEformEtrancE
on
Friday, 21st February 2003 @ 10:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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You stole a bit of my soul tonight,
And willingly I let you,
Because I felt like you already owned a piece,
Stashed away in a drawer somewhere,
Put away for later,
But in the dark, it’s grown like a fungus.
You stole a bit of my soul tonight,
As we oscillated like two parts of some gigantic, organic machine,
An oxymoron in itself,
Two separate entities that together form
A being more whole than any other,
Intertwined,
Breathing each other in,
In the smoulderingly warm dark.
And just for a second it felt like you’d given me the key to your box, and I’d stepped inside,
And for a beautiful moment,
We couldn’t tell which parts were you
And which were me.
You stole a bit of my soul tonight,
And willingly I let you,
Because now I have a piece of you,
Which I’ll keep close to my heart from this day on.
You right every wrong for me.
I am immersed in you.
You absorb me totally.
All in the time it takes a tear to fall,
An eye to dry,
A smile to form.
Copyright ©
EndEformEtrancE
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2003-02-21 10:00:00]
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Re: You stole a bit of my soul tonight
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 21st February 2003 @ 10:16:40 AM AEST
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| Great write, very powerful thanks |
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Re: You stole a bit of my soul tonight
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by roisin on
Friday, 21st February 2003 @ 10:39:19 PM AEST
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yeah.."I am immersed in you. You absorb me totally." so easy for someone to steal part of your soul, when one finds themselves in this state...nice write
rosie |
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Re: You stole a bit of my soul tonight
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 22nd February 2003 @ 08:37:56 AM AEST
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Hey man, u know i'm not much good at judging poetry and the ideals it should represent....
but i have to say that i was well impressed my man, more are needed!!!!!! |
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Re: You stole a bit of my soul tonight
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by tease_whizz on
Saturday, 22nd February 2003 @ 09:35:07 AM AEST
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| beautiful, emotional, natural, you capture the feeling so well - great write as always :) keep them coming xxx KT |
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Re: You stole a bit of my soul tonight
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by razorbladerose on
Friday, 2nd May 2003 @ 09:12:52 AM AEST
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"And for a beautiful moment,
We couldn’t tell which parts were you
And which were me." Took me breath away there! I love this write! So beatiful and heart felt
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Re: You stole a bit of my soul tonight
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by Jacquelynne on
Wednesday, 21st May 2003 @ 11:12:49 AM AEST
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wow....I am speechless....you took my breath away with those beautiful words and the perfect harmony in which they were placed....it's like you actually found the words to express the pains and sorrows and pleasures of love, keep writing.
peace
love
freedom
jen
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Re: You stole a bit of my soul tonight
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by Saira on
Friday, 5th September 2003 @ 03:39:15 PM AEST
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Quite an impressive write. Good work here. Thanks!
Saira |
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