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Foolish actions
Contributed by
Caged Soul
on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 03:01:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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cock crowing – early morning
fire smoke clings the air
breaking dawn, sun rays – distorted
by paraffin lamp – cracked
rusted sheets of zinc moans
around wooden frame.
Young Man awakes from slumber
traumatized by dreams of the night before
dreams that have their origin from
a visit to the Healer Man two weeks ago
Young Man – vision blurred by ignorance
& miseducation
glassy eyes stares at his feet
advise from Friend plays in his mind.
Desperate for salvation from his dire situation
he sets off – in an attempt to change his destiny
a destiny determined by his foolish actions
He sees Little Girl running in the road –
the lure of the innocent to cure the scorned
he closes his eyes as he tries to
muffle the cries of Little Girl
After all he leaves – shaken
leaving Little Girl laying torn in her own blood
her destiny altered by Young Man’s foolish actions
One month later – Little Girl lays in hospital
recovering from bodily bruises, but there ain’t no cure
for the evil Young Man left behind
Young Man – behind bars for 10 years
conscious plagues him – knowing
unable to take it
razors edge become all too tempting
Young Man now victim to his own foolish actions
Copyright ©
Caged Soul
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2007-01-22 03:01:23]
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Re: Foolish actions
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by damned_saint on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 06:21:19 AM AEST
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very very haunting...
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Re: Foolish actions
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by PhantomVampyress on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 09:59:18 AM AEST
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very good imagery and very powerful write.. its very chilling because this kind of stuff does happen.. its almost like the sins are haunting the person. very well written piece
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Re: Foolish actions
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 01:03:37 PM AEST
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Ash, You must not stay gone so long at a time. I miss your writing. This was really a hard-hitting piece. Very moving. I cannot help but feel so much sadness for the girl and the young man who obviously made some bad choices. This is a great story. Is it fact? The last line really sealed it for me, separating it like that made it stand out very well.
Thanks for sharing.
Peace and hugs,
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Re: Foolish actions
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by Caged Soul on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 03:14:25 AM AEST
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Hi guys, thanx for taking the time to read my poem.
I thought it would be good to give some clarity for the motivation behind the poem, so if you have the time, follow this link: http://www.news24.com/News24/South_Africa/News/0,,2-7-1442_1462561,00.html
Thanx again, much love |
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